Crime Guilt

Crime Guilt.......

Bitch pressured my nerves about a man who chose me over her
Her jealousy and obnoxiousness caused my killing side to stir
I set her up at a cabin for a talk but my feelings got viciously insane
I tied her up tightly and set the cabin in flames filled wit propane
I stood before the burning cabin laughing to myself knowing she died
Then thoughts of being locked in prison came in then I suddenly cried
I vanished off into the night running from whom? My own wrong
On my trip across the country I decided to write this crime a song
Televisions broadcasting my face saying the doings I did
From hotels to crack houses I layed low to myself and hid
I didn’t feel bad about what I did to the bitch she got what she needed
On the News screen the showed her burned flesh some of it still bleeded
I’ve killed other hoes before but yet those bodies have not yet been found
They fucked my emotional stage so what goes around comes around
I had a home under ground took my life away from the living on the grounds
Having dreams every night with me running followed by police sounds
My guilt and also the pain build up more each day that I continuously hide
Would’ve called to chill with my fam but my secrets in them I couldn’t confide
Sometimes I cry but at moments I laugh menacingly at my many crimes
I lay beneath the earth only free living I can find is when I’m writing my rhymes
Robbing stores and killing the innocent to keep my life on track
Remembered my precious daughter Alexis but I can’t stop now and go back

i know the structure is kinda a mess to some of you epople when you read this, but if you read it fast enough you will get the flow........

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Well, you did a great job staying on topic. In contrast, your writting ability is very high and this was a great drop that could be a contender depending on how the audience takes in the concepts displayed in this writing...The flow set the tone for this piece...

Good Drop...

thanks for the feed..
uppin for feed on this ya'll

uppin for feed back on this shit namean^^^^^^^^^^.

your vocabulary was neat, had good rhymes. you need to work on not having ya lines too long though okay. it was interesting, nice topic as well so keep writing, and improve on ya shit a little not sayins it wa sbad, but it was hot just need to work ya flo some mo

i liked the emotion in this OM, u a crazy gurl Cuz....lol, but i liked the vocab and the concept that though u murdered her u did feel some sort of guilt, this was new to me, i liked it, work on ya structure cuz, ya lines were so long it almost seemed run-on u kno, nice drop