Punch Line Puppets

punch lines
that's cool for the average
but a savage
stay locked on necks
till the hold broke
and when he's pulled back
a savage take the whole throat
then pull it out his mouth
and show you what woulda spoke
punch-lines
is like coke and wine
its cool when ya wit a dyme
but not when ya adding dimes
clear thoughts
got to match up every line
every time
I settle down in chosen minds
I punch
no jabs no comboz
just one blow
stand back and watch the head go
back and forth
but only so far in either way
forget the beat
they trip off what I came to say
so lets climb
to levels where punch-lines
amount to poetic ramblings
heard while gambling
up here
its all about the energy
whats said getting carried
by power and intensity
and punch-lines
remind you sack lunches
playing the dozens
and fighting with ya fake cousins
Man talk
get to the point
through the smog from a joint
in a fog from the joint
saying things that should be written scripts
you can tell its authentic
cause the way a savage give it
aint meant to be silly or funny
like these punch-line puppets
with they Pinocchio money
And dont act like you dont know
that lies is what made ole boy money grow
he throwing up wood chips
for his C.E.O.
carving Hip Hop Stars
He's Ja-ped-do
Punch-line that!
sit back and think on something real catchy
I think I heard the same thing said
on 50 million other CD's
and you wont catch me
then again I rehabilitated some ideas
perfected and set-um free
I guess that's the ways of the industry
punch-lines run some
and then there's me

uhm not too bad flow wise.. format is a bit meh!...a few decent rhymes but got a bit simple in places.. interesting flow still
i'd sapost with a bit longer lines, and exact the bars for impact

decent

keep at it

pz

this is bad, sorry.

M eh,Really didn't like this.

thats all i have to say is "meh" about this piece...the rhyme scheme made me not even wanna read it bro...try settin up a little better