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The Time Is NoW!
The Time Is Now
Can't stop me......I'm workin' without the gadgets
bezerkin' to all the faggots who's learning to try and match it.
For certain they try dispatch it, they're needing to find the answers
unable to like with cancer...so they surrender with hands up.......
I'm chasing all my dreams and running away from pain
the anger is in my brain, i'm living it day by day
to get this all off my mind, i'm hoping that God will hear
the prayers i keep inside eternally with fears.
I'm observing the perpretrators that'r faking to try replace us
I'm waiting to make a statement just scripting this shit on paper
I'm rising without the saviour.............The time is now
to break through these obstacles that destiny calls clouds.
Colliding personalities that front and try and threaten me,
and chumps that have to check to see, can't beat me with a rap degree
Live this life respectfully..................The time is now
The king has arrived.....so all my servants bow down!!
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i think it woulda been better with a different title with it
you had nice rhymes, the topic was cool also ya flow was hot as well.. i liked your style and the rhymes was tight tho real deal. this was a commanding type piece, i like how you lay it down on shit doe thatz hot the last two lines, (good).. it was more like you were talkin about god in here but you had a nice verse
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Thanx, your feed is always appreciated greatly...if u culd leave me a link, i'd hit sumthin of yours up...uppin
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meh played topic but i liked it
title didnt really match with the topic in my eyes
but the flow was nice and the vocab
keep it up
pz.
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haha, thanx for tha feed...and wat name wuld u reckn be good...?....coz i was sorta stumped on it :(....Uppin
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the tilte reminded me of john cena
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i think u need to rhyem more rating 7/10
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Im an arrogant bastard myself but i back it up with tight verse full of multies and internals and tight punches but you didnt really have any of that in this piece so your arrogance aint just. This piece wasnt bad but it didnt grab my attention, your vocab was ok some of your imagery was above average but that was it. Your flow was decent in the first 4 bars but then you got inconsistent with it. You need to mix in some multies and internals to make your pieces more complex and that way you'll get better feed.
Try and think of punchlines and metaphors if your gonna be arrogant you gotta back it up with some nice verses and this wasnt good enough.
Next time you write think of a good song concept and keep that flow more consistent then your pieces will improve.
Return the feed on my last OM:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=236625
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It had a nice flow to it. The first four lines was hot and the rest was good but had room for improvement. If you would of kept up the tempo you had in the first four it would've been better, but it's still a good piece.
-Play-Boy
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lol...nice feed...and thanx for that, your link has been hit up warchild...
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it was good but it didnt fit the title though.
