2005 visa versa remix

this ive done put down vocals and its on my soundclick but ima drop lyrics and a link so you can read and listen


Hook
this the 2005 visa versa remix
i pray i dont go to hell for this shit
is heaven hell or is hell heaven
when i die, where am i goin'? thats the question
lord please why all these people testin?
i think my birth was a mutha fuckin blessin'
somebody give me a sign and make it quick
this the mutha fuckin visa versa remix

verse
what if heaven was hell and visa versa
if you tell me go to hell nigga im gonna hurt ya
its spiritual warfare thats goin on
people diein as you listenin to this song
im doin wrong through out my life
but its visa versa so the wrong must be right
so tell me how the fuck im supposed to act
it visa versa so ima try to relax
dont gotta watch my back no mo'
cuz it visa versa so dont nobody wanna put me unda the floo
smokein marijuana is now legal to do
so cops ridein by tryin to burn one with you
slangin dope is a good thang
so theres nobody on the coner so theres no mo' slangin
mabey some day the world be like this
but for now its the visa versa remix (echo remix 3x's)

repeat hook 2x's

outro
keep ya shit(gun cocks)cocked at all times nigga


heres the link to listen to it
HI-FI
http://www.soundclick.com/util/getpl...d=2814348&q=hi
LO-FI
http://www.soundclick.com/util/getpl...d=2814348&q=lo


forgot about the 2 links rule heres my links
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...21#post3192921
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=1#post3192941

:wtf: ok THANX for the feedback and comments :huh:

well i guess no one wants to share there opinions so fuck it its pointless

uppin for feed god damn aint no one wants to leave feed on this

uppin for feed**....................................

I read the rhymes i didnt click the soundclick cause my computer wont let me access it. I think this piece was pretty basic, the concept was you trying to drop some deeper shit which i can appreciate but you didnt do a good enough job with the verse. Your vocab was too basic for you to create some good dark descriptive imagery which a piece like this badly needs.
Your flow was also basic the one syllable rhyming bar sceme is old so your gonna need to mix in some multies and internals to make your pieces more comlex this will help you get more and better feed for your oms.
Next time you write try and think of a solid song concept and work on the things i said and you should notice an improvement in your pieces.

Return the feed on my last OM:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=236625

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Originally Posted by warchild

I read the rhymes i didnt click the soundclick cause my computer wont let me access it. I think this piece was pretty basic, the concept was you trying to drop some deeper shit which i can appreciate but you didnt do a good enough job with the verse. Your vocab was too basic for you to create some good dark descriptive imagery which a piece like this badly needs.
Your flow was also basic the one syllable rhyming bar sceme is old so your gonna need to mix in some multies and internals to make your pieces more comlex this will help you get more and better feed for your oms.
Next time you write try and think of a solid song concept and work on the things i said and you should notice an improvement in your pieces.

Return the feed on my last OM:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=236625

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i agree

tried and failed.......concept decent.....sort of original....but the outcome just doesnt hit it right.....if I wasnt in class Id hit the audio and see if its anybetter in audio but thats for another day

that was the shi

yea lex that shit was hard
my nigga if u didnt record it
u should

i did theres a link under it for the recorded version

uppin for feed

uppin for feed.....................damn this shit been slept on

uppin for more feedback...........................

shit man....nothing like wannabe thug white kids from Kentucky thinkin' they're hard, sayin' nigga.

Come to the D and drop that shit, and even your dumbass can count the blocks before you get chopped.

edit: o yea, nice 1min instrumental intro...I almost turned that shit off before I had to listen to your overproduced, under-amplified vocals...