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final curtain
death is certain/ life is not
when the curtain drops and my heartbeat stops
and there be no more/ blood to bleed
maybe by dying im supplyin my 1st good deed
a new breed of bad seed has spread
ANARCHIST come equipt with a good head for blood shed
im hood bred/ so it puts me in good sted
whatever you've got planned just know that im pre-pared
but never scared/
with my last gasp of breath/ i'll laugh in the face of death
before bein blasted in the chest/ no plan 2 be the last one left
in fact i know that death is comin but my soul will never rest as long as one of my tracks are runnin
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Well, man...
You gotta real simple style...you really should try and expand on that...
You're running straight statements...no metaphors, not really any wordplay.
And stop forcing rhymes...you did that with "pre-pared"...the fact you had to seperate the syllables is your clue it's forced.
This shit right here...
death is certain/ life is not
when the curtain drops and my heartbeat stops
and there be no more/ blood to bleed
maybe by dying im supplyin my 1st good deed
Was the best shit you dropped...nice ponderous thought there at the end...more people should mull that shit over...there'd be alot less fucked up people on earth.
Keep up the practice...write all the time, man.
Peace
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Word Up On The Feedback
U Have 2 Alter Ya Shit When U Put It In Txt
Just Gettin My Barings On It
