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Fr33style (my 3rd rhyme)
rocking at a party with bitches drinking bacardi
got dem hoes shaking there thing screamin hurry
beats pumping bit of snoop singing ladi daddy
pussy all ova but god dammn der was dis one
da bitch musta weight a tone tellin me bout fun
clocked teh gat and told her moove or die hun
running screaming outa da party dis mofo is crazy
da right bitch run smoked so much my eyes goin hazy
now sitting on da chair or lazy afta an hour im back up
looking for a hotie to freak with, der is one bitch wodup
telling me im kinda cute by her man is right behind me
as i was turnin a hook to my jaw he be sayin sup now g
crew ruuning in to watch my back bats knive and guns
crews getin feud up bitches screaming and dat fool runs
chasing out da party in the streets fool still be running
closing up on him but now i relise my crew be gunning
cought up to him ma boy tript him and showed da nine
points the gun to hes head and said who the bitch dis time
kicking started punches slash slash gash the a gunshot
after taht all you hear is silence then sirens oh shit were hot
my boy blasted this figure and he only rushed one trigger
now we running from the cops tryna hide the nines and glocks
but we wasnt fsst enough now we in tha pen in diferent blocks
conteplating why im hear listening to nothing but chains and locks
when are we gona take minute and relise this is were my life stops
see all bout bitches and thugs
and all bout snitches and drugs
this is my 3rd rhyme hope you like it
UPPING FOR SOME FEED BACK!!!!!
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my 2 links
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=227691
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=227697
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upping for some feedback good or bad i need comments so i know what to improove!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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this ones a bit better.....vocab is lame..structure is iight...punches bleh...
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you spit then if u spit something betah dan me ill stop rapping for life go on show me u beta den n stop jusdgin were u have neva showed one rhyme on this site
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