Introduction

Ah... I'm pretty new here so heres just a lil freestyle to pick up some weight..

I'm tha ill rappa here to shut u out/
All my fame and glory is enuf to make u pout/
they call me Tha Evolution and ime here to roc tha mic/
my skillz so tight they'll take one glance at me and tell yo ass to take a hike/
They set a date for last week for u to go on tour, ten minutes lata u here dem bitches nockin on muh door/
I also got the l00kz to score/
while you sittin there thinkin how the hell do i fuck this whore/

well anyway let me kno wat u thinkin mayb ile cya around the forums

you really need to elevate..your rhymes have simplcity disorder...na but for real..elvate your whole flow...and read tha rles bfore you post in here....you need two links to two replys youve made to some ones pieces on this site.~1`

well i do freestyle so i can say this, u need 2 elevate, ill read more of ur shit when u get better. peace

Yea homie i agree. Your vocab is 2 simple. Ur structure was ok but u flow was off at a lot of timez. But you can get betta. Juss keep droppin n elevatin.

Wot can i say really,you need to elevate and no real detail allthough the flow wasnt to bad the rest of it wernt gd homeie jus keep elevatin

Take some time to compose a written. It will give readers a better feel for your true style, and the feedback you get will be more pertinent. This was simple, as people have said. Writing to a topic will help to become complex.
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