Hopeless

HOPELESS
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My mind has more strength than a million know-it-alls,
And each rhyme has the depth of a billion poets more.
Each line has the length of muliti syllable vocal cords,
And each sign that is sent is a miracle in spoken form.
Written and lyrical protocols uttered through minimal hope,
Divine and cynically hopeless thoughts muttered as jokes.
Broken souls crash through my shoulders like kamikaze soldiers.
And there cold loads decompose, and I carry them like boulders.
I hold each bone like a brothers hand and call there home my motherland.
Focusing on burning the coldness of there bodies to warm another man,
Boldly coping as a charity, only older Mothers can do this happily.
Deeply and madly in lust but so angry, there's no trust in this man of me.
Insanity broods inside my blood as it runs rusty red in rivers of blisters,
My love is dead like my sisters wish to kill Daddy's mistress.
My tongue is sooooo twisted like supercalifragalistic...
...Expealadocious, But Im the only one who knows this.
My life is so bogus, so attrocious. Repetetively hopeless.
Embedded with lovelorn locusts and roaches, No place to go...
Its better forced than made to show this pure whorage of the name: Joe.
I'll never know... Born cordless because I am so ahead of time,
Torn between gorgeous and aborted, more there choice than mine.
Taught to be blind and deaf and to forceably accept death as a crime.
Fined for letting knowledge process only against the progress,
Tamed toward the coldness of the acception of loneliness.
Poetically deep but I never sleep, being hopeless is the only promise I'll ever keep.
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All must reads....
Johnny 6-Feet - Looking Over My Shoulder
djb - Running
K9 - Suicidal Failure
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Def Poets
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shit this drop is nice....nice word play and imagery....wishing there was a second verse to this....keep at it son... keep droppin fire

it this drop is nice....nice word play and imagery....wishing there was a second verse to this....keep at it son... keep droppin fire
^ i agree

I like it
The big words in it all play'd a part and
U kept the internal rhyming intact, which fo me is very hard
u also kept 2 the topic and i really understood what u was saying
Bacuse u expressed ur Pain and joys thru ur lyrics and
i could kinda feel it

Overall
this was good and u had a good topic 2
very nice Drop

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Thanks for the feed, btw, feel free to nominate this if you feel it neccessary and also clikc he links in my sig,

Upp

dope, this should get a nom, it is deserving. i will break it down and leave feed when i get back. bug me so i dont forget. great stuff though. everything fit perfectly and your comparasions were nice along with the subtle complexity. very good.

Thanks fam, I left feed to your piece as you know, very very good... People, make sure you hit the links in my sig because each of them imo r HoF material, if not very very good.

well no body's sayin tha real...this has goood this...and this has good that....NO..this had good EVERYTHING...very dope...very ill....i loved everyaspect of this..flowed so smoothly..multis..vocab,wordplay...structure..ever ything...so dope...im nominatin this shit right now...keep droppin tha hottness.....can you hit tha link in my sig thats titled When the Sky Falls..id appreciate it..and if you have time...vote on my topical battle against KaRtOoN..the links in my sig as well...thnks...and very dope HoF nominee you got here...~1~

Ok man, Il drop Feed to your piece in Om when i get home from work, but Im sorry I dont vote on battles. But thank you for the nomination, it means a lot.

Uppp

that's the shit keep it up

*spechless*... that was hell gud! loved tha wordplay, structure, vocab, complexity... n it all made sense... flow was on point! keep droppin, luv to see more pieces from ya

^word. cant really add 2 that. good shit homie

I've already read this i think but it mos def needs upping. What can i say to my fellow team mate and scouser? I loved the boasting tone this piece carried in places, you imagery was just plain crazy in a few parts which made it entertaining as hell to read. Vocab was strong but not over the top, the multi's were well placed and strongly rhymed. The length was just right, the topic was a little hazy but your writing was shining from start to finish.

Great work comrade.

Def Poets, fuckers! Don't sleep.

Thanks Johnny and all who replied, upppp'n!

This was a very good drop. U had a really good flow, very good vocab, n nice multi's. You also had a good structure 2 go along wit da flow. Keep droppin dem threads. If you can, hit up da links 4 me in my sig. I'd prefer u hit up da battle but its up 2 u.