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Until the End of Time
To the Until the End of Time beat by 2pac...
Used to sit back and slack, but now I rip so y'all shout at me//
Askin how I do it, just do this, get a glimpse of reality// 1
And go ahead and put yourself in the shoes of ya favorite rapper//
Envision you on tour, tryna remember everything that happened// 2
Wakin up, askin yourself "Can it be that this man is me?//
Am I actually livin this life-long fantasy?"// 3
Still dazed from the show, just took another bow//
Still shook from the crowd, feelin like "Look at me now!"// 4
Video on MTV, millions more fans by the hour//
Could you ever imagine even havin that type of power?// 5
Where the entire world hangs off everything you say and write//
Searches ya bio and idols you every day and night// 6
But reality aint the same than when you dream of the game//
It's more than just a stage and the fans screamin ya name// 7
It's a business and it's scary to think even then shit's political//
But I'm makin money i need, so i guess this shit is cool..Until the end of time! 8
it's for a collab im workin on, just wonderin what y'all think of this. get at me on this
(and gimme a minute to get the 2 links here real quick...)
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It wasn't too bad. Flowed nicely, and made a good point. I didn't really like the finishing line, that whole, till the end of time thing. The rest made for a nice read. Could done with maybe a few multies, and a bit of an improvement on the vocab, but other than that, nice piece. Keep it up.
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this was aiight...you had imagery...your vocab need elevation...as does your wordplay...tha slashes give this piece a noobish feel....you need more complexity..other than that not bad...keep elevatin and droppin.~1~
