suicide

feelin miserable, always cryin, stay feelin bad
shitn is so hard for me, that's why i cant halp but bein mad
close friends always wanna know why i'm always sad
tellin the truth, i told em there's nothin that can make me be glad
sorry on the inside, mind set on shit i was hurt by
i sent a message around to my homies askin how would they feel if i die?
lonely, it seems lik i'm not loved from anyone thats close
dont know why, but i feel that my man creepin with so many hoes
feelin asamed, stayin up writin in ma diaryi cant sleep
hurt more and more everyday my feelins are hurt so deep
i wanna die, i dont wanna succeed in livin on this earth
it makes sense to me cus eveyday i'm betrayed even worse
dont this shit hurts, cut ma arms up with a razor and watched ma blood flow
pain in my life what di i do, i dont know
i watched the blood drip and drip until it hit the floor
thinkin to ma self like, i just cant take this shit anymore
killin ma self can relieve my pain and stress
why should i live if i'm worth alot, but people take me for less
drove around until i found a place to die and came across a bridge
while i leaned over the water way below i had serious thoughts about ma kids
second thoughts about jumpin but i felt i must not live this life
its time to go up high took a deep breath, shed ma last tears and said good bye.....

aight...... i see your new......and this wasnt bad at all.........the rhymes were simple and the flow was ok... structure coulkd be better... the topic was ok......kind of interesting..... keep it up.....overall 7/10......keep elevating and keep improving too.....and you should have read the rules....the mod can tell you all about that...:) have a good day

thank you....

hmmm I would have to give this a 6/10, It really lacked big words, I noticed you just use boring stuff like mad, bad, glad, Try and make it more complex, also the flow was pretty whack at some parts, 20 sylabol lines followed by 7 syllabol lines, It was okay for a first drop

i really dont kno y u would write a song about suicide unless ur like eminem or somthin but its kinda weard, dont like this kinda shit


no h8