Crying Mothers Son

CRYING MOTHERS SON

A young man who doesn't understand tha world
lives for his mother, cause shes a woman of pearl
everyday he walks the streets looking to help her
but he gets caught in the game, now smokin weed he perfer
addicted to drugs and violence this man never incline
now a crackhead with nothing, his life continues to decline
till his fate finally took a series of bad turns
he meets with a crack dealer that ask him if he burns
now fallin out by the hand of a gun
now you peep out the story of a Crying Mothers Son

that goes to my boy who no longer with us RIP Blaze the crack and drugs got hold of him now he dead cause a crack dealer wanted to get a crackhead of the streets we will miss you boy

couldn't put everything down it got to me but because of him thats my passion to succeed

yo you got to edit this cuz there is a 16 line minimum rule.. need to follow or it gets closed yo...
anywayz...simple rhymez and flow and the structure was alright.. need improvment.. keep elevating and keep up drops.. ok/good job.. :) overall 7.5/10 this can be better.. have a good night

its was str-8 simple tho......work on yo flow i give it 7/10

that was hot nigga

i liked the way u put passion into dat shit

ayo u should drop another verse on this .........................................o an check out my battle against lil saint..................he aint drop yet but i did

^ahhhhhhh^ more feed thats 1 line.... unbeleivable... hahhahahaha
by the weay in my other feed... this was ral hot but needs a lil bit more of improvement and this would be a 9! :) like i siad before.. good night

yo i need a co-leader 4 immortal souls so who ever wanna try out i'll give u a position now

it was very short, I would've liked to see
a longer peice seeing as how this had more
meaning then just any other verse to you...

alot of emotiogn and depth but really short should add 1 or 2 more verse so it will be
a much fuller song... but ur flow and structure were all right
i just think u should redo this with a few more verse and repost
ud probably geta better feed

Closed. Minimum of 16 lines.