10 lines
you first
30/check
no d/r
h/v
c/v
g/l
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10 lines
you first
30/check
no d/r
h/v
c/v
g/l
checkin in..............................
this nigga tresdon says no crew votes.......like hes recruited
if you cant write proper rhymes take a look at your hand and shoot it.
we both new at rb but it seems like you new to freestyle
nigga think he gon win easily....reality check this aint 8 mile.
this herb wrote fuck you in his sig,is that aimed at us or aimed to yourself
if you comeback and say you in a crew,how you gon say that when you're all by yourself.
this nigga quotin tupac like he gangsta in his own way
after I post my verse this nigga gon be quiet no kind of shit to say.
you fuckin neewb let me hand you a loss
you gettin hurt in this was the effect,you acceptin this battle was the cause.
yo you gon spit or what
i'd say i was shocked at ur verse but its wack just like i was expectin
how can we take you seriously when u post ur verse with ur checkin?
shit !! your pre-school rhymes are dated son this is no longer 1996
but i guess in time things aint changed cus u aint new to ridin dick's
with a self glorius verse not even hopes n dreams will win u this G'
could accuse u of havin weak punchs but then u didnt even diss me
suggest you take elevation classes G.. ask them all the Questions
could tell this fake emcee was wack n that was my 1st impression
take the lost and and hide your record G...lower ur head in shame
im surprised u can write for ur battles G..since ur baffled by ur name
sorry homie had to go do shit sorry for the wait
uppin
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with a self glorius verse not even hopes n dreams will win u this G'
could accuse u of havin weak punchs but then u didnt even diss me
v/tresdon
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=199313
G:... I think you came a weak with your verse and you couldve came harder, well you shouldve. Some punches seeme force and shouldnt even be considered a punch because they werent even much of anything. Other punches were played and werent even hard at all. Next time come more original and try not to force lines so much and just come out with it and same with your punches too because overall this was a weak verse.
T: Damn...you merked him easily. You were pretty constant with punches through out your whole verse and they were some what direct. They werent really played and they were more effective than his were. Your structure was good and overall you just took this battle easily. With just one bar you had him easily merked...but some lines could of been put better, other than that, not too bad of a verse...
v/tresdon.
last up
this nigga tresdon says no crew votes.......like hes recruited
if you cant write proper rhymes take a look at your hand and shoot it.
^^what?? makes no sense
we both new at rb but it seems like you new to freestyle
nigga think he gon win easily....reality check this aint 8 mile.
^^weak, insult him more and more directly!
this herb wrote fuck you in his sig,is that aimed at us or aimed to yourself
if you comeback and say you in a crew,how you gon say that when you're all by yourself.
^^weak, don't ask questions unless it's witty and disses them
this nigga quotin tupac like he gangsta in his own way
after I post my verse this nigga gon be quiet no kind of shit to say.
^^weak, not direct enough - why is he going to be quiet?
you fuckin neewb let me hand you a loss
you gettin hurt in this was the effect,you acceptin this battle was the cause.
^^this is your best line and it's only ok, but you're getting closer to the right idea here
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i'd say i was shocked at ur verse but its wack just like i was expectin
how can we take you seriously when u post ur verse with ur checkin?
^^hehe true, but it's only an ok diss for harshness
shit !! your pre-school rhymes are dated son this is no longer 1996
but i guess in time things aint changed cus u aint new to ridin dick's
^^haha, not too bad
with a self glorius verse not even hopes n dreams will win u this G'
could accuse u of havin weak punchs but then u didnt even diss me
^^lol, true
suggest you take elevation classes G.. ask them all the Questions
could tell this fake emcee was wack n that was my 1st impression
^^hmm okish
take the lost and and hide your record G...lower ur head in shame
im surprised u can write for ur battles G..since ur baffled by ur name
^^ hehe, ok
v/T - no problem
OH and LOL the quote in your sig is not from 2Pac. 2Pac stole that from a well-known quote by Friedrich Nietzsche (who wrote it in 1899) I thought you should know, so you can correct it ;) http://www.quotationspage.com/quote/33943.html see? hehe
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i'd say i was shocked at ur verse but its wack just like i was expectin
how can we take you seriously when u post ur verse with ur checkin?
Meh, this was o-kay. Not really a good battle. you both need work but my vote is obviously going to tresdon for having at least one fuckin quotable.
tresdon - damn u merked da fuck out him jo u had good punchez and personalz yo wordplay was goog and i liked yo structure da t was a witty verse
g - man yo verse just sucked but then tresdonz verse made yourz look worst yo whole verse was just self glory