*Suicidal thoughts*

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=1#post2504894

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=1#post2504862




since Issue made those two songs one ghost in New York, the other about being Addicted.. I decided to make one about Suicidal thoughts.

So here it is..


“Suicidal Schizophrenia”


[Hopeful Side]

Severed thoughts, mental pain and anguish...I can’t stand it...
Never caught with anything I can manage...I didn’t plan it
Dark figures and shadows, ghastly images...heartless threats
I paid for the torture with my soul...now the heart comes next
Always taunted, I’m pass being p*ssed off...it’s not surprising
I would stab myself with this knife, but I have more thoughts arising
Poison I would engulf most of, or maybe stick some forks in the toaster
But let’s end this quick...I’ll just pull the gun right out its holster...
I don’t hate life, in fact I love it...It just happens to hate me...
I’m both the victim and the suspect...There’s no one here who can save me...

[Deranged Side]

“Read the bible? That’s crazy...man my problem isn’t that simple...”
“Instead of ‘going to church’, I’d rather blow the right side of my ‘temple’...”
“There’s a thought...” I stay talkin’ to myself...all the time
I did it once watchin “60 Minutes”...they were talking bout Columbine...
Yeah, I’d come in with a trench coat, a shotgun, and an evil ass glare
But I’d probably blow my head off climbin’ up the first flight of stairs
F*ck this earth and all you people in it! I wish you all would suffer...
Sh*t, if my mother were still alive...I swear to f*ck I would snuff her!
Piece of sh*t, I’d slit your wrists and clit...then f*ckin’ split...
Then laugh maniacally as I yell out “Payback’s A Bitch!!”

[? Side]

“Skeptic spits I’m vexed and sh*t, all hexed and fixed...
Flood the pain! Someone please raise the water to my neck and lips!
I can’t forget, I can’t admit, this pain all scant in bits...
Mash the knife to my heart, death is tranquil in every sense...”

chorus-
I fucking hate you, You stupid Snitch
Ive said it once PAY BACKS A BITCH
While you sit there and make plots,
I sit here and right down how to kill you with my SUICIDAL THUGHTS





NextOnMyShitList-
These are the sounds of an incapicated sole/ So overgrown and old when you inhale hits from the bowl/ your body just slows and the suffering grows/ Till you want to be black and blue from your nose to your toes/ the stentch of your clothes reeks from the blood of your wrist/ As you apply another band-aid to a gash the size of your fist/ you're naked and starving- the bones poke through the skin/ You just can't wait to wake up from this shit hole you're living in/ You take the gun barrle and place it on the tips of your lips/ No words, no gestures, just letting the tigger do as it may wish/ You reminess- all the times that you miss/ your wife - your old life- your flesh and blood- your kids/ You close your eyes and realise that's good, done and over with/ that bitch moved out and took everything good you had and ran over it/ The slump you're in seems to increase by the second/ You grab for the seringe but everything you had has already been injected/ An empty bottle of pills teeters on the edge of your hand/ You just wish you could try and make this dumb bitch understand/ You're not a violent man and you do what you can/ BUt she took that final thread and threw it away in the trash-can/ Now with your bottle of 40 - a 12 gauge- and an empty bottle/ Your body starts to twitch and your minds full throttle/

chorus

Outro- Suuiicciddall thoughts.. ugh ugh yeah. HAHA (fadeout)

Can i get soem motherfucking feed lol

Yo hit me up with some feed man

Alrigh this was ok....The first part The only thing i liked about that was that it had imaginary and small portion of emotion...The 2nd part was good too, felt your feelings. Work on upping your vocab.

Overall- nice shit bruh.

Nice shit, thought it rhymed pretty good, and had some straight flow.Average work of skill and creativity and good vocab, nice imagery too............

pz. 8 out of 10

Hit my battle up and give some feed back
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=198844

Pretty played topic.

You had a few decent lines, but your lack of imagery and emotion threw it off.
Like this. / is gay.
Dont ever use that shit, its just annoying, and makes people not want to read it.

Just keep trying.

Thanks anymore feed?

thnx for the feed n e more?

not very bad or good

no imagry and emotion fucks up the all ready played topic...
as one said above.. '/' is gay... VERY FUCKING DUMB AND GAY.. dont do it
hit my OM and actually leave something