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Devil Made Me-Aching
The people circled me, im the guy in the middle
Im the gerbil see, and the war on crime became civil
My entire department betrayed, deceived by a liar
Telling me how I behaved was bad, so I had to get fired
Bosses and all saw this, and took it to trash me
Comin easy to call shit on me, now its getting nasty
At last I get sick of it, turn my back on my old friends
THey fixed it and loved it, thinkin bout it gives me cold skin
Feelin of anger arises quickly, it aint easy to digest
Why did the devil pick me, now im takin this with me to my death
I like it, so I decided to ride it and got to excited
And now look at me, Furious, lost and misguided
Wanting revenge for something I did, I wanted Gods powers
SO the wick in me ignited, now lookin at the families I bought flowers
I killed there loved ones, and it was over something stupid
I shove nuns out the way, and get on the stage to say...
THE DEVIL MADE ME DO IT
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The people circled me, im the guy in the middle
Im the gerbil see, and the war on crime became civil
i liked the first line on this an i liekd jow u compared urself to things nice.
My entire department betrayed, deceived by a liar
Telling me how I behaved was bad, so I had to get fired
Bosses and all saw this, and took it to trash me
Comin easy to call shit on me, now its getting nasty
i like the flow on these lines an like how it is built up.
At last I get sick of it, turn my back on my old friends
THey fixed it and loved it, thinkin bout it gives me cold skin
Feelin of anger arises quickly, it aint easy to digest
Why did the devil pick me, now im takin this with me to my death
like the rhyme scheme on this .
I like it, so I decided to ride it and got to excited
And now look at me, Furious, lost and misguided
this was nice i liekd the flow an your use of words.
Wanting revenge for something I did, I wanted Gods powers
SO the wick in me ignited, now lookin at the families I bought flowers
I killed there loved ones, and it was over something stupid
I shove nuns out the way, and get on the stage to say...
THE DEVIL MADE ME DO IT
yeh this was deeo like how u let it all come out an liked the ending part the short sweet sentence nice.
overalll yeh i really liked this had some nice lines i like the rhyme scheme in this alot and the flow was on point all the way through vocab ws nice made it easy to understand.stay up thnx for checkin my piece out -1-
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Nice and consistent flow...I liked them multiez in the middle..
8/10
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Yo...since I peeped Ur ish...U think U could peep one them battles in my sig?
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This was ok. Sort of a played concept for an OM, but you took an interesting twist with the whole office space scenario, etc.
Basically, my main problem with this piece was it's length. It seemed way too short, and just as you started to go somewhere with your story, it ended. Also, your vocab was a bit too simple for my liking, but that's not a huge problem because it worked semi-well for this piece.
Keep at it.
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I think this peice was straight...you could have played an iller concept on dat do....had some nice flow to it....good Multi's....but nothing that really stood out.....but straight peice DUECES
7/10............
