Eye Contact

I drink deeply from the rim of a jar
filled to the brim, teeming with creative juices
my heartbeat displaced by the grace of her eye lashes
Batting one thousand, profound and grown in a rich soil

A glance in her soul crafts makeshift wings
that i travel out of my mental labyrinth on
Taking a crisp bite into her ripened mind
Her heart a red delicious, plucked from purity

I long to prolong every sunset on her iris horizon
then steal peeks like a theif in the night
bare soul, a frozen stare a scare crowed
from the warm blackbird pie of her eyes

Baked in a deep puddle of pain, i wade in the view
Taking a pew at a sermon before a pastor of passion
and raising my voice to the sprites of her sight
Then slowly descend, drowning in those eyes...

Mourning dew would trickle thick from my eyes
If i ever lost her from this palace fashioned for love
Never to fall through the cracks of the floor
take the path from peace and pass through revolving doors

But as the morning comes, on these planes of grace
I painstakingly take a blink, all the while anxious
waiting a lifetime to return to that burning sensation
That i once tasted, swallowing the sight of her glowing embers

But as i embrace inferno, i'm subjected to barren land
eyes averted, submerged in more pressing tasks
as the black clouds above my eyes on my brow loom
a single raindrop stains the slopes of my smile

1luv.

...elevation is key, 1luv.

....another elevation...1luv.

Nice one here Franklin.... kinda confused me for a little bit... but I read it over again, and its a nice poem.

Great imagery.... and its a topic thats not all too common around, so it was a nice sort of get away poem....... I really liked how you described everything so well, but left room for people to dream if you will.... The last line just left so much to see.... you really did a nice job...


PLEASEreply to my poem "Restless In My Sleep"



....bless


~*UnO*~

One last up...Shawty i promise i'll check tonight, 1luv.

I checked it Shawty, and i lied, one more up cause i want replies...1luv.

This poetry section has really gone downhill, shit.

This poem was incredible and it has but one reply?


"my heartbeat displaced by the grace of her eye lashes
Batting one thousand, profound and grown in a rich soil"

"Taking a crisp bite into her ripened mind
Her heart a red delicious, plucked from purity"

Wow. Those lines were amazing. This whole piece was extremely creative and original. I really enjoyed reading it. The unique descriptions and word choices in this piece were truly captivating. Nice ass job. Shame you don't get more replies.

^Thanks DaGyrl, your words mean a lot to me, thanks for the positive response, elevation is key, 1luv.

Damn Fresh, i totally agree with DaGyrl on this one this piece was exquisite man, the imagery was dope and your word choice was really just on point, i couldn't really find flaw kid overall really strong, keep droppin homie...
-Fiasco

^Thanks a lot man, appreciate that you've been reading a lot of my work, and thanks again everyone else, elevation remains key, 1luv.