Ya Lifes N Minds Tricks

not much to say to this i just wrote it for no reason

i posted to feedback msg's i dunno the url thing to well but i posted kamikaze victory By LePRaKHaN and gangstaz By Hoodmaster

i tired of seein niggas rap about guns gangstas and shit seriously read this and listen to my words there's more to life than pickin up a gun and if thats all u see rap as u got a lot to learn

Beat that goes with it "After the War" by Sindustry


tactical devastion's my declaration's wat i'm facin
soiled hands prove prosperous upon sight of bloody nations
livin by luck or ya fucked n thats enuff
when medicare ain't enuff to save a love when its tough
poverty mocking me but my words are lik sacretes
philosophically possibly makin mockeries of society
proprietary mind is scary but never tear me
put faith in the hands of the virgin mary who finally bared me
abide by the laws of man engraved in stone or sand
animal or man when u contemplate the death of another man
kill a man but watch the pain u see in his eyes
see as he dies inside he cries his final moments alive
go ahead rest in peace wat peace is there to be
die solitary hail mary deaths a momentary disease
brotha gainst brotha its tough enough to see another motha
who's sons clustered side the chaotic pain that lifes mustard
i'm still young but grown up i see my lifes its first hand
if ur to blind inside ur mind the pain will come in time man

I don't know why i'm the first one to reply to this, but that alright. I liked it, alot. Anytime someone really has some shit to say, that's a bonus to me, and since your flow was a solid (if not outstanding) as your message, it came together. Vocab wise, it wasn't weak, I liked:

"poverty mocking me but my words are lik sacretes
philosophically possibly makin mockeries of society"

but it also wasn't outstanding. I think as long as you speak emotion, and don't try to be fake you'll have an audience. I think if you elevate you skill level, you'll have a following.

This almost seems poetic. At times you skipped around and it didn't make sense. Some multies would have helped this alot. I liked it, but improvment can be done.

not feeling it really it was ok to short no muiltes really vocab was good though so keep elevating and like flows said it was kinda Poetic