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Dear John djb & lyric
Dear John,
I love you, but cant relate to the hate pursue to do
visions of kids in tubes like me continue through
true I brought it on myself inhaling cancerous smoke
now I don’t breath but choke, clinging onto hope
paralyzed by doubt I spout 4 u to choose a new route
I pout cuz I can only write not speak and let pain out
devout in love, but your product makes me succumb
run down and frowned alert but seems to be numb
john for me please leave and save lives in my name
blame the money that came, quit and forget shame
my last wish is this.......family man, no tobacco CEO
tow two daughters, a father farther away from the 1 I know
What happened to your wife, was unfortunate to say the least
But at least you’ll see, that soon she’ll finally be at peace
We’re put on this world to die, but its what we do with life
That builds our legacy, before we rise to meet the Christ
You’re a very successful man, coasting on life’s plan
But think of the costs, before you take your wife’s stand
Your in a multi-billion dollar business, of course there are risks
But shit, theres a warning on the pack, when people buy it
They know smoking kills, but yet they do it anyway
Isn’t that their fault? They smoke and you get paid
If you quit your entire life’s work, what will you do?
Come on man, its not so bad, jus logically think this through
please, see you gotta be faithful, fulfill her set goals
pull away from greed and impede evil to free her soul
you put her in her grave, don’t let her ideals die this way
prey and act for her today instead on behalf of the shame
take your name off the cooperate ladder, focus life on after
leave the wine and champaign, campaign for what matters
u wanna float to heavens skies on a materialistic carpet ride?
or oblige and dive inside to find a divine connection lies
meet on clouds of enlightenment proud of the fight you gave
the lives you saved, reverse the plagued to live another day
and no, you didnt make your wife smoke, same with the kids
give in, support or abort, think about the things u already did
mid life strife, just lost his wife, john cried this night
his plight was give up the cash, or fight for whats right
listening to voices on his shoulders he grew colder
transgressed bolder he looked to the stars and told her
“my love, I do it all for you, please believe my fortitude
not money, you and our children were all that was true”
john took his tie off and removed his golden wristwatch
threw himself into unemployment, to get his love caught
death taught the importance of life, saddest story of all others
two daughters with a single father, living for a departed mother
lyric is in italics i am normal.
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You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.
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i didnt really understand the format of this until i read the last paragraph...But after going back over to look at it once more i see the creativity put into this. It's a shame wut smoking can do to you and you just gave a vision of how it can affect someone's life... Very nice. The flow was on point all the way through, i c alot of skill
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thank you very much, yeah we are very deep and smart....lol. up
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honestly, one feed? please we want some more
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wow om is getting extrememly gay. please give us some feed
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yo this was a very emotional drop, i liked the concept and tha flow from both of yall, good imagery overall id say it was 9.7/10~ good shit both yall!
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thanks for the feed. can we please get a little more
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Boo@people not leaving you feeds...
Very nice topic guys and i liked the way the storyline was conceived.i am a smoker so i the topic appealed to me more... the emotion was deep,and the imagery was well painted inside my head... djb's rhymescheme was in some places a little predictable, i liked the one you used in your second verse(liked the multis too), but still good rhymescheme fam and i can see improvments in your rhymescheme... lyric's rhymescheme was very nice. both of you had good vocabulary and pretty spot-on wordchoicesl...overall a very nice piece guys... keep it up!
Peace!
