Bottled Dreams

Perfectly shaped pieces jousted
with the abstract and wavering
emotions that speared through the
veins. The ship in the
bottle with a symbolic life
of its own, breathing your dreams
like any gust of air, assimilating
into your conscious like an ashen,
fantastic spectre gliding through
the vortexes of purgatory.

How can a small, decrepit ship
trapped and beating forcefully
against a wine-tarnished bottle
spin you with fate's silk
so heedlessly..entrapping you
in a cocoon of regret like a spider
until arachnid legs sprout from your
coal-tinged eyes, shifting frantically
in every direction trying to claw
out of your sockets and into the
gravitational pull. Let the despair
flow freely from the grottos of
your visage..open your eyes wide for
the atmosphere burning sunset..
and..realize that..

symbolism runs rampant across one's
brain. A small trinket of
disreguarded unworth to me, encapsulates
every message that your brain
has ever received..cherish your connection
and entrust your genuine dreams
with the small tokens of symbolism
that sit idly in your life. They
will listen to you more than any relative
or friend or blood-and-bone cadaver, they
will act as vessels for your dreams
even when your heart untwines itself
from the hands of fate's grandfather clock.

It's really chill but I dig the way you compared our brains to bottles in a ship. I usually favor more aggressive stuff but this is cool

wuddup mac...
I dont think this was up to par with last weeks drop but it was still pretty good. What kind of writing style is it? Anyway id say the best thing about this poem and most of your others is the dreamy flow and the diction you use is original. I cant really offer any advice cuz im not familiar with that style of writing except to maybe spend more time on it since you said you keyed it. Overall nice drop.

Check Slumber A la Paradise please...

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Dope and vivid imagery, your word choice was impeccable and the somber tone of your piece really helped to paint the picture in my mind...word placement and choice aroused the desired reaction from the reader, you did a splendid job at executing that, overall dope man, 1luv.