the new nigga on RB

ayo the name's ghost, you faggot, musta HEARD of ME
so EVIL on the mic that Pro-Lifers try to MURDER ME
to those that don't feel me, let me CHANGE YA MIND
i rap circles around you FAKE GUYS in a STRAIGHT LINE
better RETIRE and SHIT, i fill a NINE with CLIPS
backless coward, i rip ya fuckin SPINE to BITS
...abused MANY trees with my PENMANSHIP
it's like i'm DOIN LIFE cuz i got SO MANY SENTENCES
if you WELL BUILT ima TAKE YOU APART
stab ya CHEST, and tell you not to "TAKE IT TO HEART"
i STAY SMART, think so quick my BRAIN SPARKS
blast enough IRON into you to make ya VEINS HARD
i speak rapidly, BREAK BACKS for NUTHIN
got STALIN in his grave givin me DAPS in RUSSIAN
never waste rhymes, i just WASTE PEOPLE
cuz i'm HARDER than trying to make "ARMAGEDDON"'s SEQUEL
....i'm HOTTER than the barrel of a 20-SHOT
HITTIN' you like 20 shots of HENNEY till you BELLY FLOP
i spit OFF the TOP, leave your BRAINS in tha STREET
keep you "on ya toes" and LAUGH while i'm CANING YA FEET
i beat "Thermos" FLASKS at RETAINING the HEAT
so SICK i made the SANDMAN go INSANE in his SLEEP
FACE IT, y'all CLAIM to spit "ACID" but ya "BASIC"
i throw you off tha BEAT 'fore the DJ even LACED IT
i RE-WROTE the GENESIS, Glif MENACES
BURNT my tongue on my LAST VERSE and BROKE my PEN on THIS

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

But this was ok man...I notice you used multies in like every line which is awesome, i love multies...they really help the flow of the piece and make it more complex...the content of this was ok..try being more open with your topics though...Vocab was alright though i thought...But for what this piece was it was alright..Keep at it.

da-ha-ha-ha-ha-yum! this was a fucking diss verse and a half and it wasn't even aimed at anyone specific. a lot of killer punchlines, consistent multi's, great wordplay...

you'd better get to the frontlines and start putting those punches to use man.

keep posting.

This was a nice verse the punches were on point the flow was consistent through the piece which always helps a verse like this.
The structure and vocab were good so i couldnt say anything to criticise this it was dope.

Return the favour.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=183323

son thsi shti was sick, nigga this shit was sick son. thsi si fa real yo peep my shit son good looks on this poiece nigag you hot son fa real

lovin the feed back

i didnt know that rule that i gotta give feed to other ppl

so ill go do one now
and 2morrow the other

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uppin

for more feed back

Closed, Needs a legit title.