Tears Of Heartache

You miss treated my heart and now all I do is suffer
Down hill from the start, But can it get any rougher?
Stole the key to my heart just to juggle my emotions
Can't believe I fell for you and my heart I devoted
Just for you to turn around and do me wrong
Now I'm poor'n out my guts in the words of this song
But Why am I even writtin bout this,you ain't even worth it
Dedicated my Love to you and you didn't even deserve it
Feeding me nothin but bullshit so many lies and deception
But I was there no matter the situation with no acceptions
I don't know how much more I can take of this lie'n and cheatin
Its hard cuz my passion burns for you like a summer in Phoenix
But I guess its gotta end and I gotta deal wit the heartbreak
And I guess I'm glad its over no more tears of heartache

this was very emotional. nice piece. it seemed like you started writing this piece a little upset but you were still concentrating on things like multi's and meter, but as it progressed it turned more into a piece where it was just venting and raw emotion. very good. very real and very emotional. good drop fam.

this was a deep emotional peice.. i liked it alot... flow was almost perfect but hey thats just me maybe u read it differently but it was great overall.

I dont normally like these types of verses but this was better than most of the other break up/relationship raps.
I think this would work well as a poem but i dont think it would really work as a rap cause its too short there was good emotion in there so obviously you been through a break up which obviously gave you the fire to write it.
The structure and vocab were ok the flow wasnt there but like i said this was more of a poem than a rap. Overall a nice drop.

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