rap game

you dont have no game
im the greatest at what i do
if you didn't hear the first time its S.A.
I write to a Biggie beat
your shocked and wide eyed
now i blindside you with a jab
B thats write i battle for real
martial artist rap artist wit major appeal
peel a rap cap
steel 211 and a tightly rolled swisha
stuffed with that
you know that bomb
green and does major damage
nuclear buds got your whole crew famished
unh. who said i couldn't do this?
you jealous but its like what' new bitch?
me man im the nuevo get off my webos
reble step up or get shut down
make you lip fat like that dude bubba gump shrimp
from ... oh... what is it now?
oh yeah forrest
so you better do like him and run
you played out im originale
only thing bitten is when you copy my style
stun with the brown swisher sweet
or green sour apple flavor
doesn't make a diff to me
but if you diss heat
i'll kick you out on the streets
whats going through your head when
you fucking with me?!
im like drugs very selfish
and i'll give you a buzz
i mean holla back when you
think its the fuzz
got me running 8 miles from home
just cause the weed got me going
liquor and fetti feels very good at
times but others it stress and man
i dont have the time.
why off the head? because its the shit
right now and im going till im dead
you all like wow! bitch id rather do
it dirty im clean on the outside
but in the in its rotten style :nono:

OTHER OPEN MICS

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=182610

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=182239

not finished... busy be patient

This was whack you need to keep writing before you think about a battle.

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Originally Posted by yellow

not finished... busy be patient

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my rhymes are made on the spot and im from san antonio texas. not on that dick riding shit, but yeah i like swisha house, plus tupac, bone, fifty, erick sermon, kanye, talib kweli, common aight, big daddy kane, jada, styles, whole dipset, old S.P.M., em, lloyd banks, young buck, tony llallo, who else is worthy of propers? Hmnh, me! uh, my sa town homie Device, bunch of other famous motherfuckers, not really down with the unknown, struggling undeground dudes, simply because there not on tv, and im going to be real a motherfucker watches alot of cable tv, holla. Oh yeah, i say whatever i want and "holla" ain't real played out or an old saying, THIS IS HOW I FEEL MOTHERFUCKERS!!! Anyway im tight and fuck you'll if you'll don't think so. audio coming soon! then we'll see what's really good with the talent, originality and creativity.

that last reply got me crunk so here is another one. a motherfucker can write poetry, draw, freestyle, and write rhymes, FUCK YOLL. its Yellow bitch, for real
im a young dude wit alot of promise , just keep looking at my rhymes. i can only post one open mic a day, and i really don't have the patience to search for the rest of the site, so keep looking for me everyday. tight shit everyday i promise. you know what fuck that im staying on this site and looking for other ways to submit shit. IM GOING TO BE A PROBLEM IF YOU'RE NOT ALREADY KNOWING. holla at me!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

you need to work on it but it was koo also make ur lines so people could read them better cuz that shit just gets boring but any way it was iight.... HIT UP MY OPEN MIC IN MY SIG

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Originally Posted by sheldon

This was whack you need to keep writing before you think about a battle.

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THAT SHIT WAS UNFINISHED BUT I DONT HAVE TO JUSTIFY THE FIRST COUPLE OF LINES READ MY SHIT OVER AGAIN. :laugh2:
NOBODY TAKES KINDLY TO SHIT TALKERS :cussing:

yo you need to work on the rhyming words and you're a newbie like me take the criticism without getting mad
plus you do need to practice a little more before thinking about battling

I would have to agree with Sheldon on this one..
Maybe If you fix it up a bit and dont make it drag.
Write something else so people can see what you made of.
Keep writing

my bad if i get hype :banghead:
all criticism accepted :thefinger

better get... that... dirt off your shoulders