jus some to show I'm still here.....HnR...ya know how we do

let's go...


I’m back to rappin’ had a few things to deal with
So I signed, sealed, delivered the deal quick
Hurried to return......
just know I bring along the real shit
Rappers suck up my music like I’d suck on Miss Beils tit
I’m steel fit, fitted to feel equipped
So if u feel like shit it’s prolly cuz of who u dealin’ with......Me is it
U try to hop on it while I’m steerin’ it
Big body benz, start cheerin’ kid...
u know it is DrztiC
My flow alone puts holes in you bastids
I hand out ass kickz like Asterix...
bitch slap just as fast as Kung Fu masters
and just like Ras Kass I’ve mastered the art
Twist up lines so spastic
spit with my brain, soul, body and heart
Throw a rhyme and rip ya whole party apart
I’m so fuckin’ hot...Cuz of how much Ice I melt
these hoes went to re-body the arche
Come and study the charts you prolly won’t see me
But once u recognize realness.....
U’ll let the poll phones run hot and threaten the TV
....stations...go all out and swear to bomb the whole nation
I’m slowly gettin’ impatient
Still chasin’ and racin’ to find my way out this maze
To start scrapin’ and rapin’
who turned on the gay route like Mase
Kidz say “Hey Now” today
But it’s too late...they way out the way......



Back to business...Call it the black Tuesday of rap
I’m bout to run this circus...u stay where u at
This shit is done for one purpose....a new day, a new wrap
Came to paper bag another wack head like a bottle of booze
U couldn’t drop super rap if u swallowed a whole bottle of ooze
Push the throttle and swoosh passed contestants
Nice guys finish last...call me an ass and get smashed then
Stashed in the dash when my peepz jump in the whip
Can’t see my playin’ with toys while pumpin the grip




http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=180617

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=178939

yeah that flow and delivery is tite fo sho.. had sum cool lines.. black Tuesday of rap


pz

wow I've been blessed with a shit load of feedback....thx

your verse got some decent multis and there are lots of inners... i can see that you even know how to accent rhyming words... you got some decents rhymes...

i think what you can do is work on a new topic coz the one that you got is already played... but still give you some props for coming out with some good vocabs...

This was a decent verse there was a coulpe of good punches in there your vocab was good the structure needs a bit of work.
The flow was nice in places but it was inconsistent in some of the bars i thought the last 8 bars flowed well so id just try and keep the flow more consistent.

Could you reply to these.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=180994
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=182306

nice enough for a boast verse man, a few good punches and a tonne of good multi's. i think your weakness in this piece is just the bar length, the lines seem uneven in some places and it affects the flow of the piece. besides that, your vocab was solid and punches pretty imaginative. i'd like to see you tackle an original topic mate.

pm me about a collab. and keep 'running' things brethren.

word...i thank y'all for the constructive criticism...yet this wasn't written on topic it was more to show activity...no real effort but nontheless I should prolly work on some points....thx

it's nice for what i think it is,more of a keystyle because like u said it doesn't have a topic.it flowed good,multis helped a lot.what i would've liked to see it's longer lines for more wordplay and a better rhymescheme(not that it didn't flow right,but u could've made changed the rhymesche often with longer bars).like johnny said do a topical one.there is a collab going on in "collab central"...if u wanna drop something...overall a nice read.keep dropping man!

and if ya have time check "lost innocence" in my sig cuz i got slept on big time... :(

AS usually a nice verse from u filled with multies. Some original punches in there to fam. Looks like DirtzC is getting back into old form. Nice drop. Keep reppin.

I wasnt feelin it u need to elevate.

It was dumb tight for freestyle. Iwas feelin it but I think you be even better if you stuck to a topic. Over this shit hit a straight 8.5 out of a ten good shit.

once again thank y'all for the luv...I'll be checkin' ya ish out fa sho...plus topicals are to come....pz

still here