rate it please

isnt it disgusting how things get so god damn trusting, to the point past thrusting and still bustin, i just must be so interusting for u to be discussing where im goin in this hell forsaken world, dis lil white gangsta girl, dont worry im just adjusting ur brains-balls-bones that im busting, i strive the oblogation to get the repuation grownin up in a nation angry and mad learnin to settle without a dad now u must undastad this suffocation keepin me lit never with the intention of a numba 1 hit oh did i mention with all this speci-FIC-ness the crowd musta forget u cuz they screamin my name oh theres more tension buildin up bubbles logic to the game who made the prediction thered never be a white dame in the rappin hall of fame, become contagious in ur skin back at it once agian let this beat play and the chours jump on it

proved all fuckin people headstrong
intoxicated rap beat to dis song
clearly right or wrong this is where i belong
chair resevered and lyrics so strong
shakin sesame street like a ball wit a athelete
micheal js heat crackin up concrete
i jus repeat my heartbeat
and end up wit my feet in wallstreet

my whole life ive been told i cant rap cuz my skin color white fuck ya whiter than napolean dynamite but damn they aint right cuz this shit tight my words still sting make u say DNY-NO-MITE cuz this whole time i put up a fight jus cuz i had a goal, now i am fo sho i dont need to kno, cuz im a self concious motherfucker named kosho, ego bigga den idaho, more popular in the hood than jo-jo havin kids wit mario-ominrian heel to toe they all like the same fake TV show, im da newest pinocchio so deep as a river go, smokin hydro and yippy-yo i flippy-flow 1 hand row other hold da bowl, whut could
i do so bad i was jus misunderstood, magic wizard of robinhood, dont matter if my shit goes to hollywood, u still gon eat it up like its finger lickin good








rate it :help:
im open to all comments or sugestions

good flow good rime
you need to devel'p writing structure
and you will be good
holla back

uppin my shit

yo thats was sweet man good job

thanks, uppin
holla

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

uppin man

the rhtms was hot but try puttin rhythms at the end of a line so its easier 2 read but it waz hott

uppin

i like this u have improving to do but the content grabbed me nicely stay up and elivate

thanks, uppin

Cool song guy

Nice Piece Nigka, Had Some Good Vocabulary Man Nice Structure

thanks but im a chick lol uppin
holla