Captain Bush (short)

An age where darkness ruled...sinister with commotion
Thousands of bodies were left ministered in the ocean
Showing no notion of love... nor any signs of respect
Cloaks torn by bones, leaving blood stains on the neck
Of a hectic maniac, a man who had power over seas
Believed to be seen... only bringing men to their knees
A mutiny had arisen, his power grew to a sinister stage
Caged by his own ambition - thrown to a watery grave
Some say: he went insane before hitting the corel floor
Core strength was flooded - captain caught in a moral war
Fourteen hundred other soldiers, hands on their swords
Swore to protect their crew.. fighting amoungst hoards
More men were established as brave, they became feared
And they were tossed to the ocean, not tasting the tears
Of the family that abandoned them - it's happening today
Some say: Bush is brave. But we'll find out another way.
He'll become feared, there will be a mutiny truely, i sigh it
But if the ocean breathes salty....George Bush is a pirate.


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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176171

Dope sig. But this was a really good piece I'm considering giving this link to OMHOF thread. I thought that this had a nice smooth flow and that the story was pretty nice. Overall the best OM I've seen from you nice work I'm feeling this alot.

dont sleeppp......................................

........faggots :)

shit had a real nice flow and made sence. Everyone should understand it

its 2 links.

thanks for the feedback...

upping because 1 person gave decent feedback

This was a tight verse i like the deeper stuff so i was feeling this.
The dissing bush concept is nothing new but you made some good points in the verse so it wasnt repetitive the vocab shined through to me the flow was ok but you could up it so it sounds smoother when your spitting it.
Overall a nice verse.

Return the favour.
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