~~~sTr8-PUNCH"Z~~~ f/b plz...

Best to 'wait on pain', I use spells to sicken...
my foes *reside in the south*, I bring 'HELL' to victims...
don't 'play no games', you'll be compelled to witness...
I'll put ya *eyes in ya mouth* & make you 'TELL' a 'VISION'...

Ya teams pussy when I bring the Hollows & things...
I'll blow ya brains out the back so you can follow ya dreams...
when I'm done, you wont even know what Oxygen means...
I'll buss my gun, pick you up and make yo swallow the steam...

Aint NO way that you last'N wit me...
this dude has to be weak, I'm clapp'N the heat~
for GLANC'N @ me...
Aint no wau you liv'n or breath'n after I speak...
I'll put ya thoughts N the ground so imagine the STREET...

depictions are graphic, I can picture the hatchets...
flames encoded in scrolls & my scriptures R magic~
ripp'N it savage, wit cllips N yo' cabbage,
cant vent from a CASKET thats why I'm spitt'N this passage...

I'm sinister N savage, havoc wit benevolent rages...
Oxymorons rollin off my tongue from irrellevant pages...
No direction, no meaning, no intelligent sages...
just relieving stress, believe these TEXT or inheret the raz'R'Z...

My melon amazes even the likes of me, cuz my life is street...
my verbals make my MIC complete, I'll put the night to sleep~
as I fight the thieves,~ who surround look up 2 me, so I guess my heights
increased...

ayo feedback plz:

my 2ew linx...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175595
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=174890

GEDD@me.... :shoot:

UPP'n.....................

eyyo, shit was tight homie... i aint lei khow u formatetd it tho hard to read

when I'm done, you wont even know what Oxygen means...
I'll buss my gun, pick you up and make yo swallow the steam...

im feelin that im dfeeli nthis peice

Hahaha, that shit was fire man. I love the "Tell A Vision" and the "Follow ya dreams" punches. You crazy as hell, lol. Flow and structure was good as well as vocab. I gotta see more shit like this from you fam.

-one

Da Crakk DOn : ayo good look'n on the feed back, appreciate it, homiE....
Check in 2morrow on anoth'R open Mic I'ma drop, same style
punches, give a holla, & I'll RETURN THE FAV:..................
__________________________________________________ _______

KALIKOZE9/11 :shoot: KEEP DROPP'N



Seminole : im definitely feel'n ya, good look'n..... same as' APPRECIATE the
feedback, keep droppn.....I'll rtrn the fav:.........holla

:shoot:KALIKOZE9/11:shoot:

Uppn.................


Can I Get Some More Feedback Plz.......................................

Vote On My Most Recent Battlez Plz, F/b Also, Will Return Th Favor

BATTLES:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176857
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176588
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176852

HOTT!!

it was decent as a beef/battle drop but not much as a solid open mic...

good wordplay, meta's etc...

flow was simple/basic though...

5/10

mines:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176869
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176604

it was iight, dont like the colorin shit too much tho, real nice flow

GOOD LOOKN PPL......................DROP LINX ILL RETURN THE FAV................

Best to 'wait on pain', I use spells to sicken...
my foes *reside in the south*, I bring 'HELL' to victims...
don't 'play no games', you'll be compelled to witness...
I'll put ya *eyes in ya mouth* & make you 'TELL' a 'VISION'...

Ya teams pussy when I bring the Hollows & things...
I'll blow ya brains out the back so you can follow ya dreams...
when I'm done, you wont even know what Oxygen means...
I'll buss my gun, pick you up and make yo swallow the steam...

Aint NO way that you last'N wit me...
this dude has to be weak, I'm clapp'N the heat~
for GLANC'N @ me...
Aint no wau you liv'n or breath'n after I speak...
I'll put ya thoughts N the ground so imagine the STREET...

depictions are graphic, I can picture the hatchets...
flames encoded in scrolls & my scriptures R magic~
ripp'N it savage, wit cllips N yo' cabbage,
cant vent from a CASKET thats why I'm spitt'N this passage...

I'm sinister N savage, havoc wit benevolent rages...
Oxymorons rollin off my tongue from irrellevant pages...
No direction, no meaning, no intelligent sages...
just relieving stress, believe these TEXT or inheret the raz'R'Z...

My melon amazes even the likes of me, cuz my life is street...
my verbals make my MIC complete, I'll put the night to sleep~
as I fight the thieves,~ who surround look up 2 me, so I guess my heights
increased...

ayo feedback plz:

my 2ew linx...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175595
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=174890

GEDD@me....

UPP'n.....................