A Guy Thing

i stay in bitches heads like pantene pro-v
she wanna cuddle after sex bitch must not know me
then wanna bug me to death to give her a massage
when im done i tell her call a friend i wanna menage
i stay surrounded by women thats my entourage
at my crib got pictures of booties as my art collage
i like those silky soft coconut shell complexions
n when that fat booty touches u, u get instant erection
im talkin instant connection, sex,love, n affection
then when ur done let her tell all her confessions
after all the talkin is done invite her to the shower
bend her over face forward n beat em with power
give her a lil kiss but not too much
when ur done let her know not to touch
get her dressed, tell her sweet goodbyes n send her packin
jump in the bed pull out the rolodex n get the next gurl crackin


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=167511
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=148657

The multis helped the flow for this. Had some wordplay, it works well in a piece like this. You were descriptive in spots, could have made it more story-based. Alright ideas, keep it up.
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175493

this just right for the style you drop
seen other work from you shit still hot

Thanks For The Feedback ....keep It Comin

was a nice drop, but thought it could be longer, nice multis...other than that would like 2 C mo'......holla....

:shoot:KALIKOZE9/11:shoot:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175764
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175743

yeah i could of but this was a lil collabo with stats so i dropped real quick so we could see the response we'd get.... lets see some more feed.....

uppin..............................

Lol topic was ok, nothin new but you came pretty fresh on it. you had good vocab on here, it all flowed well. multis were strong, wich helped the flow alot. you had a few played ideas/conecepts on here but i wasn 't surprised considering the topic, but overal you came pretty decent on this, sorry i 'm to tired to leave longer feed, so i 'm just givin the basic idea of what i think of this, and you came pretty good. keep at it!

it was.....funny, mainly because that's what most men DO think about...

the topic was eh, ok... the rhyme scheme and flow were easy to get but the metaphors and wordplay were simplistic...

sounded like it would've been better freestyled...
6/10

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176604

yea this was ok....I mean kinda played but u found a way to make it interesting to read...the multis def helped...stay up..pz

that was hot......i was feeling that rapping piece

Topic was funny, multis helped out a lot with the flow of it which made it sound better. Other than that it came sort of funny... More of "im so gangster" sounding coming from you. Though the structure needs to be longer and straighter. I didnt enjoy it as much as other things I read... Maybe its just because we have a different view on things.

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176338

^ thanks.

had some sick flow and vocab but i didnt like your concept. didnt like the story or the imagery here...didnt really like a period. felt the flow but thats about it...i dunno what to say...keep writing

thanks.... i will keep all those things in mind, in some parts i was tryin to make it a lil funny, but i appreciate the feed....

the flow was reallll nice... you're one of the few kids i've seen on this site that probably actually rap instead of just write shit... props on that

work on your multis

in my opinion punchlines should only be occasionally used in non-battle verses... but when u use em make em nice.... work on your creativity with punches

but this is one of the nicest verses i've read here not because of the lyrics, but because it reflects a knowledge of actually rapping... something rare among textcees

props
7/10