an emcees passion

in influential times my rhymes remain one of a kind
spoken words from a piece of mind
i flow freely constant creativity diagnosis benign

deep thoughts of hip hop brain cells active non stop
spit like clock work killer verses tic-chop

im so prominent your quick to make an assumption/
when the truth is revealed your confused cause a female spits funk like confunkshun/
they say "girls dont have a place in this rap junction"/
my fiya to the highest degree when i lay words you suffer from a concussion/

damn could you ever fathom
that the rib of man would excel adam?

1 step from the plate my goal is to annihilate without hesitation/
accepted, respected, lyrically injected is my sole destination/
my lack of compassion coincides my arrangement of complication/
my mind releases so much liquid my brain suffers from dehydration/
an intricate session hazardous, rigorous, my vivid imagination lets lethal words escape that creates devestation/
my time is now i rise and reign with the best to attest an emcees contemplation

lol the dehydration line was kool.. not a bad piece here, you got some room for improvement.. maybe string your punches together a little better and tighter up the rhyme scheme but this was a nice read.. pretty consistant.. peep this
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176138

thanks for the fb..im workin on me

Drop Is Average.
Rhyme Scheme Is Okay.
Multies... ... ...
Wordplay Was All Right.
Elevation On Those Key Parts.

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

check out:
the scriptures:writings of a mortal soul by k-9 the shit
whatever happened to hip hop by sexi-dominicana

wordplay was nice..thats true i liked it..i liked the 'tic-shop' lol..nice drop.