8 Bars And Runnin'.....FeedBack Plz.....

oh,no im back here... like baby bash n a-kon
the smirk on my face attracts more gurls then a-von
been in a lil trouble but dont worry im safe mom
back witta lil more intensity that my raps is based on
im like luda i came to take the number one spot
to steal all the bitches n take em to my can-dy shop
we-cant-be-stopped, its g-money n s*t*a*t*s
spilt muthafuckas up like the g-unit camp
terrorize newbies like a terrorist attack
my team move-forward while yall relapse
foo's can talk crap but its never enough
i'll show how this cali-boy is forever tough
now that my mind is emancipated, my flows anticipated
gotta make sure that my rhymes aint outdated
imma under-rated over achiever, im make doubters believers
and i dont consider myself hot until im catchin a fever....

TO BE CONTINUED..........

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i like it... i wanna see the ''to be continued part'' lol

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Good shit, money.....I liked this......Audio here we come

lol@ the name.... this isn 't really "my thing" but it was decent.. flow n structure was on point...didn 't see to many multis, not as many as there could be... last 2 lines were ill... was a few lines that i wasnt really likin, but the last 2 were ill... nice drop!

thanks for the feed..... keep it comin dont sleep on me y'all

Uppin ..............................................

yo this shit is tyte, i like the usage and shit but yo pretty good check my open mic out PLZZ but yo lol on the tytle lol im out
(ppppppppppphhhhhhwwwwwwwwwwwwweeeeeeewwwww)
and im gone

Had wordplay in there, keep that up. Some nice ideas, but a simple topic. Work on putting your concepts to a topic that you can go in depth with. Flow was alright, and had some vocab in the verse.

Pretty tight drop. Your lyrics were pretty straight, nothing to special there. Structure was cool. I liked the word play you had in it. Overall, your piece was average, and pretty good. Made sense, and flowed well. 7.8/10 (For an Average piece)

thanks for the feedback...im feelin the love i appreciate it y'all