Sick Widdit

switch'n ma' style a'Lil.....

My barZ is Mono-Maniac, N my metaphors'll smolder this board,
you could never be Ill drawing lines, from umbilical cords,
ya downfall is that, yall is performers of sorts,
cuz ya rhymes suck, more than gettin head from a corpse,
artificial ametuers, pretend'n ta be valible candidates,
while ya couldnt give my rhymes a run for its money,
like philanthropists,------ aint this some savage shit....
pornographic statures, cuz im nasty as fuck,
you beatn me, yeah..! that'll be ya luck,
i bring prolonged torment, 2 those who aint worth it,
guns burst'n, in turbulance,
you could never be ill, practicing perverted shit,
untamed in my barbaric ways,
great and rapacious like cosmic rayz,
voracious wit rage, uncultured N caged,
i spit vulturous sages, on multiple pages,
got these cats sick, like the symptoms of AIDS is,
aggression lead'em to the rise of their victory,
aint gotta explain nothing else, the rest of it is history ....

:shoot:KALIKOZE9/11:shoot:

Time-2-Write= estimated: 14.5 minutes.

would like feed back plz...

2ewLinks:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...62#post2132962
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175040

Had some nice vocab. Flow was pretty good. A self-glorification type verse, if that's what you like writing about, make it interesting with wordplay and multis. Keep writing and you'll find your style.
Return the feedback
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175493

nah, its just what came inside my thoughts, good lookn on the f/b,
but self-glorification is a good topic tho'....holla...

Will return da fav.R:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...38#post2140238
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=174433