Situation On Dirty

I creep on scenes with beams, don't sleep cause I got demon dreams/
wake up gleamin wit sweat sheens, flashbacks of combat like a muthafuckin marine//
My serrated knives claim lives, thrusted deep like Olympic high dives/
leave battered golddiggers in my wake if they tryin' to get 'mines'//
I go out of state and connect wit mad number runs/
I'm continental, travel great lengths to collect my number ones//
Stop lives like red lights when you enter into my district/
Ya'll smoke too much weed, when I read ya lines, it shows you're Bisquicked//
I got lots of tricks, but ain't pretendin to be no silly rabbit/
my 'lines' get you hooked, like an addict with a serious crack habit//
some heads say my lines are all but pre-writtens/
Hell, all I can say is, at least they ain't pre-bitten//
I have originality in my formalities,best to bring your best mortalities/
'cause IllIce like to freeze heads before performing mental fatalities//

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Some nice vocab in this verse. You had some wordplay, keep that up, you'll get better at wording them with practice. Concepts were alright. There were multis, made it flow better.
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Wasn't really feelin this one too much, Work on your structure, And count your syllables so it flows better...., But keep dropppin tho and try to elevate......

Twaz' alriTe....could work on ya wordn lil mo', formulate ya structure, u got the basics holla.........
KALIKOZE9/11

holla.............
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