Listen UP

when I talk, niggas get taught
They learn to walk and not get chalked
They learn to step and not get wet
They learn a vest, don't Protec the neck
I school dude's, on the rule's
you play the fool, you pay due's
play it cool, play it smoothed
any other way, you play, you lose
I'm givin you the up, figurin you'll duck
you don't want the buck's, to come from the truck
keep shootin out the mouth, get shot the fuck up
keep poppin out loud and get popped the fuck up
Chopped the fuck up, you not that tuff
you not an Ox fucka, you not that buffed
you not uncut, diamond in the rut
don't make me put the clip in, have you lying Inna tuck's




the link's
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175070http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=174913

speak on this

could have been a lil more complex, seems more like an oldschool feel of a drop. Vocab could be expanded and structure could be worked on.

Hot line:

you not uncut, diamond in the rut
don't make me put the clip in, have you lying Inna tuck's

this is a good start but def need to work on it more bruh.

no hate.

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This was ok but there was nothing that was dope no punches no metaphors just thug shit.
The structure and vocab was ok the flow was basic.
Keep writing but try and write better punches or deeper shit.

Return the favour
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175486

This was a simple verse. Work on upping your wordplay. The topic was basic, try and think of something that you can go in depth with. You had some multis, keep practicing with those. Line length was alright, the verse read easily.

simple shit...lacked could of good but its playe
try using new concepts and up your vocab

thanks