"I Just Wanna Kill" by The Reinvention

Killing sprees is something that descibes me at the moment..
I'd love to bite off the top of a grenade, and just throw it..
watch the thing explode five million people, all get burnt..
If it werent for God, id kill everyone I know who does me harm..
Id be goin off like a f*cken car alarm, and stab people in the arm..
Go to every city, every farm, Id kill things just to reach my peace..
I'd feed all them people who are obese, so they get fatter never sease
existing, im always gon be wild, never gonna change me id stomp u wit cleats..
choke ya with meats, and make ya swallow bed sheets..
You'll be screaming dont kill me in your sleep, shut up sucka..
I'd stab you, and your dad, ya crazy motha f*cken f*cka..
Blast ya in the eye, you'll be blind by my fury man..
imma rage war on your family so bad, like afgahnastan..
If you woulda ran, you still couldnt out run me and my gun!
When I shoot, ya die, instantly without hesistaion, sound fun?
My mind seeks annihlation, so flee from your life, outta history..
Put ya ass outta missery, im done wit life as we speak!
Im gonna spend eternity wit my blanket, cause I fell asleep..

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Lookin for some replies on this.. so hit me up yall..

Good piece. The imagery was good, and you got the psychotic vibe off quite well...Good use of multies, flowed rather well. Dopeness.

Check out my Lovey-Dovey Dopeness .:: I Stand Alone ::., if you have the time. ^_^

Aight I will check it out today sometime.

Um...

A bit hypocritical considering the Jesus shit in ya sig, eh?

But, good venting...nice cutting loose...

But, for the most part, emotion aside...

This was not very good as far as format and rhyme scheme go.

You were kinda all over the place.

Still, for a drop that basically just screamed...this was aight.

Emotion was an ok substitue for skill in this case.

Peace

hahaha i was thinking the same thing, man thats funny.. the verse was crazy kill everything everyone stabbin n cleatin shit lmao then i saw ya sig.. but yo, as far as lyrically this could have lots of improvement, in that sense it was simple, as far as entertainment, lemme tell u this was kool.. stab people in the arm? lmao thats comedy, keep at it bro.. peep this plz

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=172961

Nice Delivery And Def Got A Horrocore Slash Fight Music Vibe

Aight Center Sight, I peeked at urs, and left some feed. Thanks yall for the feedback.

Yo Man Threintervenation Watever Yo Name Is Lets Battlke Just Sei It Up And Ill Prove That U Is Whack

nice shit to spit when yar borred man.insane shit,ya know?ya should find better rymes,elevate so mo',ya know?try to ebolarate mo' vicious plots,kill people really sick,jason x style...mo' or less it was ait bro!try to do better,get up your mouthplay...and,one thing i didn't understand:if ya wrote about killin' and all kind of sick shit,why cenzor yar shit?"I'd stab you, and your dad, ya crazy motha f*cken f*cka.." :) civilized pshycho,rit?

Frustration and rage wor portrayed well in this. That's about all I liked though. It was just a rant piece that didn't flow well. You got the emotions off though. that's a good start. Keep writing, homie.

My Open Mic: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175565