Game Over

The police always comin to my door harassin my ass
got them motherfuckin pigs diggin through my trash
they know i'd be a good catch like a 10 pound bass
but i elude them like a championship did the utah jazz
try to get me to give up peeps, destroy me like a demolition derby
but i ain't givin no names like a yankees jersey
and you won't hear me spit nothin through the wire like kanye west
i'm careful on the cell i choose my words like it was an essay test
they can put me under the hot lights but get nothin off my chest
nothin to confess, no charge , so no grounds for arrest
i wish they would just leave me alone
quit tappin my phone quit showin up at my home
i can't take the pressure like donovan mcnabb
so i'm hangin up the scale and i'm hangin up the bags
i want a simple life and fuck hoes like paris and nicole
so these cops can get off me and get back to they patrol
i'm done with the game and thats from the bottom of my soul
cuz i don't wanna be a gangster i don't wanna "be cool"

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not bad... stucture was a little off at times... but overall sturcture was good. try changing up your vocab a little pick some more complex words to really impress the reader. flow was on target not amazing just on target. nothing really interesting about the story but it was stil alight...

keep at it... i liked it... :) good to see some fresh skill on the site.