ain't no title just call it the bible

do you wanna see me rap my ass off, shove a piece of grass up there and cough, i don't know how you do it, this is how i shit, anal seapege is a thing of the past, its sort of like a thing that goes blast, i'm not worried with tears, i'm worried with fears, what if it goes wrong, what if the doc is wrong, what if i can't smoke my bong, damn this is too long,
dont ask me what it's about, i have no clue i'm just spitting it out, like a freestlye killer who never watched thriller, i found a hooker down the street, she said she likes to be beat, so i smack her ass a little more often, next thing i knew she was feeling my big ten, had no clue how i got here, maybe the drugs had an effect on me, my mind turned to mush next time you see me i'll be shaving a bush,

Flow was crap and I'm not feeling this at all. You had bad structure and you seem to be a follower or you dont know how to be creartive and not post the same thing everyone else is posting.

i agree with you 100 percent. i'm not a very good rapper and i shouldn't choose it as a profession, hopefully one day i'll be good enough and actually create a flow that everyone will enjoy.

all i can say is elevate on every aspect of flowing.~1~

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

too basic... your structure was bad, flow was bad.. as they said, your lacking pretty much every category in text.. but we all started as that, so keep writing and you'll elevate in time.. work on your structure, flow, multis, ect. Keep it up!

Work on your topic, write about something you've established not random lines in a freestyle. Work up to posting your freestyles, practice with writtens first, and you'll get better.

Work on your vocab and wordplay it will make ya flow sound betta use rhymes with more than one syllable it makes your piece more complex no one likes reading cat hat bat sat. But for a newbee it was alright just elevate and keep spitting and eventually you will get there