Bang

yo whatz good rb
I'm an upcomin artist str8 from p-town, jerz
blah@quality, i need to get in the studio..
This is 1 of my groups 1st trackz so feedback would be greatly appreciated.. :thumbup:

1st verse & Hookz- J Scriptz
2nd - B Semi

holla

www.soundclick.com/bands/semizaffliated

you cant even debate or knock what im comin from/
i lay low in the hood, the cops what im runnin from/
tote guns, dont give a fuck and i never have/
i dont talk shit, i just let the beretta blast/
and now ya plans are blown/
its evident the only clips yall load is on a camara phone/
get a clique, u cant stand alone/
my team originated from way back, even ya grandma knows/
this shit im on is destructive/
my lyrics like a s.t.d becos he the wrong 1 to fuck with/
ima show u what tough is/
the p-town squad is the realist, smokin weed in either bongs or dutches/
i'll leave u in crutches, condition be drastic/
u niggas lack skill i think u missin some practice/
and u know my cds are classic/
and on some beef tip, u can flee or get ya ass kicked/ biotch

ok

beat is raw

1st guy flow was straight, lyrics were nothin special...u rode the beat nice
hook was catchy..
2nd guy flow was on point, delivery was nice, lyrics were good...was feelin it...

u guys got potential, keep droppin

beat is straight

first cat...put some emotion in that...first could sound hot if you droppin wit the emotion it should have

not feelin the chorus...make that shit bump...put some emotion into it

2nd cat got a nice voice....some nice wordplay in there...and metas...straight...get more hype tho boss..need to work on that...both of you

stay up

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=169764 holla back

good look

i already replied to urs

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1st dude rapped lil emotionaless his lyrics were ight though and voice wise to
2nd dude def nice im feeling it i like the beat but i feel a better drum loop or sample would hit better the chorus though i wasnt feeling much fam na mean but other then that yall got some talent if i was you id take out the lil what thing haha the outro and sound effects were kinda raw lol
ight fam stay up

Im guessing since you posted the lyrics from the 2nd verse, that .. thats you.
So i`ll give feedback on that verse, I was really feelin it. Flow was pretty nice, lyrics were gangster like .. they were nice. Quality wasn`t good, but your verse overshadows that fact - good track though, i`m really feelin it.

the quality actually isnt that bad, dont know why u was knockin yaself... 2nd verse was real tight, thumbs up, flow was consistent straight through, thas what im talkin about... the hook is, it isnt bad, but there's something about it that seems off, i think its the "what's" i dunno, maybe its me. first verse, work on ya emotion, u sound monotone, it would help the overall effect of ya verse, cuz the lack of emotion almost makes ya flow sound off even though it isnt... the beat is solid too, if ya'll made that thumbs up on that too. keep it up, ya'll aint bad. ez

check me out...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=169514

thx for the feed back, i appreciate it

i'll reply to ur track 2moro guy, im drunk as hell and on the verge of fading out

that was strait raw shit... like that harlem musik...loved it....listen ta diplomats much? any way keep doin what ya doin. botha yall ripped it... where yall from?

good look holmez

^in

drop ya links, ill reply

that fucking some sweet stuff

beats to main streme qualit ok not nuff presence lyrics cool i gues flows preety on point over dubs ighht seem to undireted or not stong nuff to be underected at an audience track peety cool hooks ight dont ike the mellow sounding dmx whaaaa second guy cool beter presence lyrics more uped and ungeneric good overdubs gued up track alot dont like then like wtf os ta botll caps poping at the end gets repetive and anoying but understand the message good shit sry if to critical

iight, from what i could understand i got ur message...lol, try commas guy...

^'in