Just a Freestyle

A Stoned Freestyle:



I'm gonna spit some shit off the top of my dome/
sittin at home/ stoned/ thinkin about what chick ta bone/
I dont give a shit what chick, as long as she's on my dick/
She gotta be quick kiss her lips ta the tip of my shit, when she licks it's bliss/ Then she moves up on my stomach/ know i love it when you rubb it/ then you start to the suckin/ then strait into the fuckin/ What's next/ it's best/ When you start to coress/ my tess-/ icals/ tickles/ giggles/ in the middle/ with my pickle/ Pump- pump/ uh uh/ now im done/ gonna cum/ in your eye/ between your thighs/ and on the tip of your tounge/


Tell me what yall think Ha Ha Ha Ha

Here is an idea. Try to stop "freestyling"/"keystyling" and actually attempt to put forth a decent written piece. Albeit story, braggadoccio, whatever. Bring forth some interesting concept aside from talking about your sexual fantasies in your invisible mansion. It doesn't cut it. Put some actual thought into the next piece you attempt to write and you might actually start to get somewhere.

Hitting "enter" after the end rhyme doesn't hurt, either. Get a sense of line. Putting a one-word line right after a 20-word line doesn't work and takes away from the flow of the piece all together.

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.