pondering why there are no responses

all positive apostles' hammers smash
then a cerberus sounds if it's its wish
crashing and then coming to a halt
the Lord his sword plunged to the hilt
still gazing back at his glorious light
i know venom and penance is much too late
in a daemons court that's cruelly dimmed
the nearly blind forsook weep as truly damned

honestly Father this time i promise to bother
burn these words to never have each spoken
aloud and lain so deeply, yet shallow in water
our hell gets hotter with a new brand of token
response, so detached by each despondent
now i know why i see no further correspondence

Short...

but from what i read i liked it.


Thats nice stuff really...

thank you

provide a link and i will reply to your latest work

Hmm A fine piece of literature. I sounded like a character from Lord of the Ring reading it out loud :p
I'm not particularly educated in the area of poetry and English...I percieve that you are. I just write to capture my feeling and express myself creativly.
I like your writing though...Hmm I don't knwo what to say. It's too clever for me to comment :|

sNoopfox

i appreciate your comments

Myth...Because of your evident knowledge of fine english and literature/poetry...
I'd really appreciate some of your feed back or thoughts on some of my other poetry...
The links are in my 'signiture' ... You maye prefer the Architect or Carbon Copy.

sNoopfox

ok, i did it

it took me 20 minutes of my time though

and i will not over analyze freeverse anyways
so there you have it