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House Of Horrors
This a little story rap i wrote sunday night its short but im thinking about writing a third verse. Its probably only the 3rd story rap i wrote so it aint gonna be perfect i wrote it after seeing this program on tv just peep and reply.
Im in my room looking at my face in the mirror
i look up and ask god why he's hating a sinner
let me tell you a tale, well more of a story
i'll understand if you wont listen and ignore me
she's shed so many but the tears still stray
they've been beaten out but the fears still stay
the past is there forever like the scars on her wrists
the pain was more potent cause it was hard on her sis
both violated by the man who should of cared the most
they both look out of place cause their bare and broke
he couldnt help the shit he did too em
the booze broke the bastard he wanted to live through em
life to them was more haunting than the worst dream
already seen all of life's realities and still only thirteen
his words slurred so they cant hear what he's saying
the oldest one understands, the youngest is on her knees praying
Hook: welcome to the house of horrors
come take a trip inside
look at the pain and power of twisted minds
one or two doors but there's no escape
it's a heartless world there aint a colder place
The kids in school have evil smiles and contagious whisphers
it probably plays on their mind but they just picture
trying to get through the trauma on this quiet day
school is safe cause at home is where the riot lays
school is over so now the day doesnt look right
they arrive at their front door and grip their books tight
they walk in, on the table is food and drink
it took twenty seconds for the two to blink
the house was empty the dad wasnt waiting
was this real life or just their imagination
the food was finished, father still out of sight
this time was stranger than day without night
the father was missing he was not in his bed
the oldest found him in the bath shot in the head
she wasnt shocked but stood back a while
then turned around to her sister and cracked a smile
Hook:welcome to the house of horrors
come take a trip inside
look at the pain and power of twisted minds
one or two doors but there's no escape
it's a heartless world there aint a colder place
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wow, i wasn't expecting the ending. that was some hardcore shit, but dope. the rhyme scheme was good in most places. but also i understand that when doing a story rap it's sometimes hard to make everything fit perfectly, and also when you spit it, it would be different than us reading it. pretty dope, i just wrote a story rap but i haven't posted it because i'm looking for a new site to post on.
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Yo that was tight I like the subject. Maybe we can do a collab? holla at me if u want to do one. But that was a nice piece,keep up the good work.
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yo this shit was tight it was deep 2 i liked it i think this could be the one of the top post ive seen yet holla back
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that was ill kid,real ill, nice vocab,real nice imagery,nice wordplay,good structure,u stayed on point,this piece was ill kid, nice ending,real unexpected.keep droppin tha hotness.
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yo that was real tight. the ending kicked ass. good use of imagery and nice structure.
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yo that was real tight. the ending kicked ass. good use of imagery and nice structure.
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my bad my comp fucked up nice piece
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tight drop bro....i think its a unique subject....keep droppin and tight ending!!!!
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you flip the script....very unexpected,memorable....before the ending i was thinkin....Man your allowed to be angry...but you crushed it ....good script
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thanks for the replies im glad this didnt get slept on, peace.
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yes indeed very nice ....nice imagery nice topic...got some truth to it ...although i didnt like the rhyme scheme too much it was still flawless ..everything u said was nice and descriptive....
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i like this piece nice emotion n imagery n kept it interesting the whole sometimes people tend to fall off......nice vocab ......n i like the topic ....keep droppin.....one
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I want a couple more replies to this.
