Outburst In Church

Proof readin over and speedin through the scriptures..
Flip the pages seein who takin my church pictures...
da congragation all in there seats with there hymnals..
Holding up there cross, and some of there symbols..
Readin aloud the Gospel of Christ, and out sin goes...
Leadin the audience together for prayer for da lost souls..
Sayin hail marys, and basking in the Lords glory...
Playin the organ, and praising Christ and the true bible story..
Men and women stand, swaying to the nice sounds of glory..
Offering comes up, money is handed over for current funds..
Counting it at the alter, wait, somethin is funny all I see is guns..
Take a deep breath, and look at the nuns, suddenly shots blast..
I aint that fast, I fall to the floor, crawlin to the door..
But im to sore, everyone sprawlin and aimin there oozies at me..
Look up one last time, and it ends all right there ya see..
Now I died, and finally I see a sign, a glimpse of eternity..
I had a choice, to stay, or go back to my earthly body..
Decided to stay and so I did, Im here forever prasin God see?

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tight drop bro i liked the subject and how you stayed on it.....9/10 keep droppin bro!

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flowed nicely
it kinda painted a picture in my head too
nice drop
9.5/10

nise story.....i liked how you made it sound decent and then i got kinda boring but after that you spiced it up and gave it a good twist.............good drop man 8/10

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Aight yo, I repaid the favor.. thanks for the feed.. lookin for acouple more feebacks..

i liked this verse the structure was good the vocab was nice it flowed well but nothing major, it was just a good animated verse.

this drop was overall alright...the structure was nice..the flow was ok...i liked the topic alot...i think you talked about it good...in alot of ways...but you could have worded ya lines a lil better....ya vocab wasnt all that bad...that part was descent enough....overall not a bad job..keep workin on ya flow...and try not to ask questions in ya rhymes...cuz to me that sounds wak..so just work on that..and everything else sounds fine.

this drop was good....you kept with the title ....used some good vocab but in places...it sounded a bit forced...but overall it was pretty smooth flowin'...your lines were to the point and easy to understand so yeh....id give it 6.5/7 out of 10
peace

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