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..Glass Figurine..
A bond about to break....
....2 souls test the patience of fate
Each carrying a weight...
....A heavy burden, much heartache
My Glass Figurine so keen pure n’ so clean...
Only fifteen but she’s what I think of when I dream...
She’s been, hurt before but now with me not anymore...
Our feelings soar & I adore her more than anything before...
...Four months...
122 days of ecstasy, she’s classy & only has eyes for me...
A hopeless MC ridin’ wit a girl unreal, jus a fish in the sea...
One of thousands but she chose me...why? She doesn’t reply...
Embarrassed? I look to the sky, why me? An ordinary guy...
An illusion? But I’m never high; I sigh & think of her again...
The pain when we’re apart & my heart can’t hold or contain...
The feelings I express are so insane not feign but so real...
I feel so real I act so real but what’s the appeal? Is it really real?
...So surreal...
A bond about to break....
....2 souls test the patience of fate
Each carrying a weight...
....A heavy burden, much heartache
My Glass Figurine is a beautiful gene n’ a royal queen...
Sittin on a throne so clean she gleans, eyes serene...
Many are green with envy jealous of me a hopeless MC...
One fish in the sea – is this the way my life is to be...?
Each day is ecstasy, a pleasure drug filling my head wit love...
...One hug one kiss...
...Heaven exists...
...I can’t resist...
...Bliss with a twist
A bond about to break....
....2 souls test the patience of fate
Each carrying a weight...
....A heavy burden, much heartache
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Not a bad piece, i was hoping to read alot more but it didnt happen. It seems like the ending was a bit rushed, or maybe it was jsut me. The flow couldnt of got any better, that was prolly your strong point. I felt that you needed to go about the topic a little better tho, seems like bits and pieces of it were missing, but thats only for u to dictate. Overall, a pretty decent drop, hope to see more, peace.
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nice overall metaphore and good flow, structure, description, the only thing that i didnt like was that your words were deep but the piece wasnt long enuff to completley express yourself on this topic
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