What hiphop means 2 me

Voices to be heard while we still around
beatz blastin' bangin' in the background
Deleverin a message reachin' power giving lessons
Shoutin' curses an' blessings
A past stayed unknown unlocking confessions
Unedited explicit unristricted
Somethin' in it 4 those that listen
Showin' love inspiration an' hate
taking control of destiny defying ones fate
Seein true sides in darktimez
with this life
Maybe it was given 2 me Az probs stay hittin' me
Somethin about this breakin chains set me free
Only God Can Judge me, stayin' tru if u trust me
Counting the pain an' losses
Livin' each day like it's my last
tomorrow ain't promised
Venturing outside lookin' to the next step
Borderlines crossing over life an' death
Golden glow lights, shadowy depths 2 the next
Seldom seen without a drink in me
The shit I say gotchu like, what was he thinking G?
Anything to kill stress preferably,
Az issues stay testin' me
Ma jus' pray for me

Started well, nice vocab, and a decent flow... Imagery lacked a bit throughout but nevermind...

The second half I thought fell off a bit, as the rhyme scheme became basic, and flow got a little bit choppy... Also the vocab seemed to dwindle as well...

Nice first half - second half let it down...

Pea-Easy

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

it was cool i liked it stay up my nig

[B]life was deth way befor i was born, niggas gave my father a crown of thorns.
I was sworn in so what hiphop means to me is a day for all men to see that life was made to be held in heavens arms g. Pac told moms to keep her head up the bitch looked in mey eye's and i guess she was fed up. I did't know it was going to be this way so hiphop means love a better day for me . My pen can't tell the life that im in (b) only the blood in my H-E-A-R-T, so at night what hiphop means to me is bleed bleed bleed

im cool thay call me C_H_I from the IND NAP

Started well, nice vocab, and a decent flow... Imagery lacked a bit throughout but nevermind...

The second half I thought fell off a bit, as the rhyme scheme became basic, and flow got a little bit choppy... Also the vocab seemed to dwindle as well...

Nice first half - second half let it down...

^i agree ..you need elevation..and stay persistent..one bad verse makes both bad unless the good verse is unrealisticly good..keep elevatin.~1~