MOSH REMIX(sorta)

this aint really a mosh remix, just sorta seems like it. and coincidentally i wrote the lyrics to the mosh beat. but don't think i'm tryin to touch shady's stuff, i don't want the feed back to reflect that, thanx peeps.

you see, Bush and his puppets
they keep on pushin our buttons
till all America's bitchin
like two old men from the muppets.
we got a chance to vote,
and i dunno but i thought this:
from the shit that they wrote
we'd keep his ass outta office.
now Diddy said vote or die,
so yo i wanna know why
we just ignore his campaign,
but then sit back and complain.
they said there's no good outcome
so tell me how come
you don't go and vote
but now you runnin your mouth son
so lets stand up for ourselves
and, maybe for our neighbors,
but if you just don't care
then do us all a favor
(and shut the FUCK up)

Possible hook:
you see we fuss and we fight,
but yo what gives us the right
to keep these issues in darkness
shine a little light
on the problems we causin
bring em out the closet
make things right
don't put idiots in office




Yo, thanx in advance for the feedback, hit me up


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...2&page=1&pp=15
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...1&page=1&pp=15

Actually This Was Good I Dont Understand Why It Got Slept On Elivate But Stay Putting Out Good Work

thanx dawg, bout to post a second verse, but this one has a little different flow. i like the first better, but this makes it feel more complete.

(second verse)
why are we tryin
to be soldiers all the time?
when there's plenty soldiers dyin
over on the front lines.
we think we're brave
cuz we walk around with nines,
while they're over dodgin mortars
and avoidin landmines
see if you ask me,
we must be out our fuckin minds
everybody dies,
but i'm gonna take my time.
wine and dine,
maybe spit some rhymes,
see if i can influence
maybe change the times.
i know that we can do it
if we just set our minds
to it... thats what they tell us all the time
maybe just to sell us,
make us think we're doin fine.
cuz when we're younger,
we're so ignorant and blind
but as we grow we know,
we slowly see the signs
see society's in a bind
we walk a narrow line
search but never find
constant obstacles we climb em.
whats the future hold,
will the sun continue to shine?


thanks for your time, dont sleep on this shit tho

uppin this like i said on the last comment it is almost identical

sorry, i didnt really catch that, its late and i'm tipsy, u sayin props right?

yes

yeah that was cool, when i read it out against the mosh beat it worked well but was off in some places, you put some thort into this and its worked well.

right can ppl please vote on http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...4&page=2&pp=15 it deserves more voters please place a fair vote thanks

can we have some voters please???..................

yo, if ur gonna advertise, at least leave some feedback first, shit, or go on ur own verse or somethin

ninja boy straight i beleive you could actually elevate a lil more........

uppin, hit this up, dont forget to read both verses

uppin, don't sleep on this shit

just leavin ya some feed back thought that both of your verses were good!!! ya probably could elevate a little but i'm not one to be able to say that!!! you're on your way keep it up it's good!!!!!!