Losin Control....ft. 2012

Chorus: (sung by 2012)
shit aint gonna change, I'm losin my control,
my life's on a stage, and I cant see, (x2)

Verse 1:
drama fills our lives, so when we combine,
its almost like a homocide crime,
then i realize, that your only takin yo time,
no concentration on anything thats related,
lendin to frustration on everything thats debated,
seems are relation, is hesitatin, I'm losin control,
why stop drop the subject issue now unknown,
no longer on the phone cold -n- all alone,
no heat in my zone, enter epothermic material,
the info's not great enough for me to hear you,
people creatin a barrier between us,
everything now seems to interveen trust,
can we last whats gon show,
shit aint gon change, I'm losin my control....

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

links:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...12#post1912412

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...48#post1912448

i was in the process of gettin my links in here you didnt have to post...

need some feedback people, deeply appeciated if my favors were returned and some people would feed

That was some hot shit but i thank you for being real about mine and no hard feelings and we might can get together and make the rest of the song if you got time

its too short. Good rhymes, okay chorus. Use some more rhyme techniques. You can use ya structure better but it was aight. nice drop, good info on what ya talkin. And keep control.lol

i didnt write the chorus, and the rhyme was short because thats all the space that was givin to me for the track....its a real flow with a group called 2012 round here where i live...peace more feedback uppin

lets go you first

nevermind waste of post........edited it

feedback people im trying to elavate....peace

FEEDBACK YO...

i'll return the favor just leave ya link.....


or the title of the thread


NEED ELAVATION PEOPLE....FEED!!

this was a nice piece, it was a bit short, id like to of read more of it, the structure was good, good feeling in the lyrics i liked it.

feedback cuh, thanks for the positive feed...

peace................

feedback.....come on

i need all i can get...

my new OM will drop soon