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Duece Dueces
I sit back,
I'd hate to believe..
that we're all a few feet short without takin' a knee.
the most tasteless of dreams are pavin' the streets..
minin' for carats, we'd grow fat to be able to see.
these tyrants of parents, are no match for cable TV
deny that they're errant, n' go fast, the pace that we need.
government branches watch us hang from a tree
for raisin' our glasses and relaxin' without raisin' our seeds.
makin' 'em bleed, n' cage 'em when they ain't gettin' beat
make up, and then only wake up for the sake of a treat.
an entire generation of the faceless 'n meek
they took the root of all evil, changed it 'n shaded it green.
amazin' it seems, that we can't say it or speak..
what's locked, we ate up the key, waitin' for a savior to be.
what we're not, and other nations should plead
when the make-believe faith of a leader is mistaken for creed.
we take what we need without havin' our name to a deed..
and we'll never kick the habit until we raise to our feet.
but take it from me, god didn't make this place in a week
it's made for the weak, but we'll never know his ancient decree.
and quit actin' like you do, cuz your naivety speaks
for every sinking feeling that ever fucking came from the sea.
~One~
~PBK~
~Tha Gun~Play Kid~
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Feedback Needed!!!!!!!! Come one Fam.........
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nice work fam....a bit short but still made a point...vocab not to bad could have been improved..flow on point a lil choppy but no ones really perfect.. overall nice drop maybe a 6 or 7 out of 10...keep dropping though fam good work
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yo this rhyme was a decently hot drop man, the flow was like he said above me alittle choppy but like i tell everyone no ones perfect, the structure was pretty good, the vocab was alright could improve, i know you can rhyme good so im not takin you down any with this rhyme because it was pretty hot peave yo (thanks for feedback on my OM)
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yeah im definitly feeling this dude...your style is very similar to mine..its kinda creepy..you got some dope thought and content going into this...feelin the wordplay, feelin it all..good shit man...we should collab on a topic or sommin ya feel me? hit me up
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