Life as a Drug Dealer

by me and my brother i choose to post this on here..cuz i know he lived a crazy life in da hood..checc it out..tho iight...
give it some feed back..

as a drug dealer I stand alone, prone to pack the chrome
past unknown; left school just to chase the faster dough
not your typical bastard though..thats cliched as stupid
I was a straight A student, that viewed his grades as useless
stuggled with a crack addiction, plus my family's wishing
I do some damn repentance for God's wrath is different

The Guardian angel:Arsenal

"Iam your guardian angel bro, iam here to assist you
and let you know your true friends and family miss you
God stuckout his helping hand you chose to ignore it
His friendship is everlasting, your friends are foreign
It’s not too late you can turn to a rehabilitation clinic
Get your life on track and see your abomination finished
i know Yous broke as hell..but the test of life is patience
how long do you think you can just hide in basements?
get high, not pay rent; dawg just comply and cave in"

The devil:Osiris(my brother)

"fuck whats right Iam satan, and its time you gave in
if Gods nice like your saying..what don't he pay your bills?
why has he not made you rich? and gave you millS?
got you laid foreals...the fuck is he been waiting on?
you forgot I made you strong, told you to blaze the bong
advised you to carry a gun incase someone raids your home
thrown chains upon your neck and made you proud
after doing all that are you telling your way is out?
who you faking clown? *I know you* I paved your rout
are you going back to the crack alleys just to stay devout?"

The Conclusion:Osiris

Damn this painfull truth! I still remain confused
the picture's clearly painted through, whatever way am doomed
asked to my self am I getting played and fooled?
then this is insane and rude, what kind of sick game is you
trying to play in my brain while my dame concludes
I can only pick one choice so which plight is right?
and you know what? I'll let a roll of dice decide!!!

get at me wit some Feedback..

that's pretty hot reminds me of BIG, record that shit.

very simple nothing complex yet well composed just lacks creative edge....now the meaning and subjects where definetly there and you didnt steer from or lack true writting skill but at the same time i cant critique on the reality of the song thats 10/10
im looking at the rest of the factors and they fall a lil short.
over all 8/10 you do have some serious talent.

thx..for da Feedback..keep it comin..thx..

thx..upppppppp

Word Perfect said some good things... You had nice multis, flow was lacking slightly, but fairly decent.. I dunno though, it was pretty generic and mundane to me though... pretty good though, better than some stuff I've read recently, just needs some work I think. Keep writing man.

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nice flow, and i like the whole angel/ satan thing. nice rhyme.

This was pretty good, as Word perfecrt said nothing to complex but a good simplistic read with a moral to it. Whiich was cool.
flowed okie imnn some parts, a lot of emotion if you read the lines differently and actually think bout them. I enjpyed this. Get at me for a collab if ya want sometime

-Rule

Agreed ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ nice flow ............................

Great piece man....this is one of those posts u neva forget about cus it was so deep...u know what i mean but anyway good vocab and structure...keep it up dogg...holla back

DaYoungsta boy!!! :shoot: :cussing: :shoot:

MAN, that was really hot. It reminded me of that Guilty Conscious Em and Dre did. I see u from NC, I am too. check out my open mics and give me feed.

yea..thank yall for da feedback..theres lots of people..on dis site from da NC>...im from NY..but live in Durham NC

Feeling this one...Liked the whole concept of the song...Liked the scheme and how it switched between Satan and the Angel...Also feeling the topic...Thing that probably sttod out the most to me were those multies...Pretty hot man...Overall, this shit was pretty nice...I'd say...7.5/10...Would definetely like to hear this as an audio...Good shit man...Return the fav with some feed on my open mic "Runnin Shit"...Aight man...stay up...1

thx...really feelin dat feedback thx..cuz u actually Explained dat shit

i agree with black~magic.

the whole flow brought knowledge, the wordplay was decent. the whole concept kept me hooked on the whole peice. i'd like to see this one on audio.

great peice arsenal. 7.5/10 as well.

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