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Losing Hope...
Losing Hope
I knew i was fast fading... wouldn't last for many days
my spirit floating away in a haze left me in a vicious daze
The cancer that eats me away... defeats so many, its sad
turns some mad, my mom asked if i was afraid, i had no answer
i knew my dad was torn, he'd sworn to protect me no matter
but now this thorn was unstopable... took me, meant to shatter
discoverd after i broke my arm... found in the x ray... ironic
demonic infection... taking away sections, free of platonic
sonic moves fast... now i have no hair... fucking chemo
Cant describe the despair, how unfair, unstopable tempo
soon i wont breathe the air, so i enjoy every last breath
now i think of the past... so vast... yet cant stop death
i guess i'll just have to cope till the end but im losing hope
fear comes, like a creeping mist, as i near the end of the rope
one light shines devine... incite to the feelings i recall
the signs that keep me alive... even in darkness stand tall
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nice structure and good vocabulary
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Flow was on point, kinda played concept but you made it your own, nice vocab with some nice multis mixed in, could of been better but overall ill give this a 8/10...
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change my fuckin name back!!!! man c'mon now
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lol
anywho.. I loved it.. sounded great.. awsome vocab
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do you think i changed your name??? wasent me...
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it was aight...multis were good...vocab could be elevated a bit more though...all in all, nice..
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nice very emotional, gd flow, nice level of complexity
gd read
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i like the shit...see my main reason for reading this is two things...I'm about to put up a piece and 2) fuck why does av hate you?
well questions are answered. Your better than him lol. Good shit. I'm really feeling it, I got my grandpa battle cancer..so I feel the shit..
Good drop..Lookin forward to reading more from ya
