"Victorious" (short piece)

I possess.......
A mind of a cynical mischief, wit an eye of untypical visions, 2 reach heights of my pinnacle limits/
I define a lyrical sickness, that'll rise your spiritual image, so just rewind this pivotal linguist, 2 revive your dying ambitions/
I collide wit these conspicous critics, who reply wit these primitive fiction,
full of bitterness gimmics/
But fuck um i ain't no innocent citizen, cuz 2 me i see ur jibberish limited, your illeterate not vigurous/
I'll diminish him, like a wizard trick post this bitch on tha injured list, cuz i request on my syllabus this death threat imminent/
And wit these rigurous, bitter-flicks I'll have u shivering, miserably, and wit this trigger squeeze witness me achieve my most profound "VICTORY"/

u have much knowledge here butit is scattered and abstract which is good for true lyricist but for a more feval mind the intent would seam to be only gibberish. u got mad talent twin dont fade just elivate other with you

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

Abstract... I fuckin love it.

If you can drop verses and OMs like that on the regular, I'll definately be reading more of your stuff.

That was, to me, gibberish but maybe i just dont get where your style is coming from. The lines seem to ryhme but i couldnt understand most it, i did like this line though:

I'll diminish him, like a wizard trick post this bitch on tha injured list,

But like i say its just my opinion on the style you use.

i found the flow difficult to catch because of the way you spaced this out, clearly defined lines would've made for an easier read. strong vocab and tounge twisting rhymes made this a pretty good piece though. a well-written shit talking piece by all means. wish it could've been longer.

keep posting.

if you could rep one of mine in return i'd appricaite it.

uppin

hey i post-up 4 most of u mothafuckas
so whats up nobody wanna post anything back,
so many of u guys look at my rap but u guys cant say whatu guys think about it that shit is fucked.
aint that what open mic is 4

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