~the Perfect World~

In a perfect world I could believe in my future…
Trusting souls wouldn’t be an oxymoron…
But for sure on, I could stand…
On both my feet upon unruined lands…
A smile graces my face, gleaming upon inexistent rage…
Honesty reigns king…
Values are not taken for granted…
Innocence resembles the free…
But the free resemble persistence…
Love is but of insistence…
The only street scars are those from cars driven…
The only sadness lies when Kingdom comes…
Because we were so embedded in where we’re from…
But knowing we shall cherish forever up above…
Where the only sin is that there is too much trust…
Too much happiness, too much love…
Too much of me, too much of you…
Too much of us, no busts…no pushes nor shoves…
No gats, no regrets, no sorrow for the past…
No worry for tomorrow, worrying if we’ll ever last…
Where I can wake up knowing happiness is plentiful…
And no matter what happens today, tomorrow will be just as beautiful…
The grass is a furnished green not discouraged by the devil’s dirt…
The sky is of the most purest blue not discouraged by a rain shower’s curse…
Where me and you will forever be true…
The perfect world is that of a richness beyond materialism…
It lays within our hearts and souls, to where we question realism…
Where poverty is nonexistent…
And of tears, scowls and anger, there are no instance…
Where I realize the perfect world is too good to be true…
Because naturally we’re human so therefore we’re flawed…
Perfect does not relate to our nature…Flawless knows no meaning…
So this perfect world remains what I’ve known for a while now…
A mere dream…


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Man that was a nice open mic. It reminded me of Nas tha way it was so deep. but keep it up and thanks for tha feedback on "THIS COMES EASY''.

iight yo i read that verse and i gatta say it was GOOD!!

but therre are a couple uh things ya gatta repair...

the length of the lines...if u had made 'em the same it woulda floooooooowed BETTER!!

i took a closer look at every line and noticed that only a FEW blined actually rhymed...work on that...


but above all i liked it especially for the topic....gd gd


keep 'em coming :thumbup:

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well yea, it's deep n provides a good piece of inside on ya thoughts....the flow was messed at some spots but since this story-style don't matter much....lyrically it's real piece...keep it up..pz

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