never dropped 1 herre b4,but chcek it out...

check it..

Your stressing me is of no fucking use
trynna game me?...bitch u so fucking loose
this anger developes in my own silence
dont make me own ya,cos den it gon be violence
i got alot of memories on how u made me cry
but i'ma make 'em old stories...xcept u wanna die
how dare you ask a whole me for a lil respect
when u know i'ld say FUCK U without ant regrets?
expect "the heavens" call....till u pay u fucking debth!
n i wanna give u a taste of my pinky glock
then tell me how it feels to c ur blood pop
cos therre aint NO PEACE till i pull a fucking shot

if you looking for a dick to ryde....herre..catch d fucking mic
thought i cant spit tight,but u wish u were my type
i keep flowing as fast like a ride,its iight u take a flight
cos i'ma make u know this aint a dyke & i eat w/e's ripe
for 6 years you werent present in my life
and now u want me to love ya..u know shit aint right
you'ld never reach my height cos u a bitch that cant even bite
if you wanna spet tight,grab a pen and start to write
im like a fire and on me u just a cube of ice
i'll grind u into pieces...like tiny grains of rice
cos im black and i can fight,and u wack cos u white...thats right

RIDE = WHIP.....a whip....a car (for who dosent know)

BITCH = THE FEMALE DOG....not bitch as we all always intendNote : i came up with this verse listening to "act a fool" of master p...i tryed rapping it to that beat and i swear it comes out tight...but anyhow...y'all tell me what ya fink...

the last 2 lines about the black and white werent to all whites....it was to the person i was spiting at...so dont think im trynna be a racist cos i aint :)

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=147731

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=147732

uppin

Your stressing me is of no fucking use
trynna game me?...bitch u so fucking loose
this anger developes in my own silence
dont make me own ya,cos den it gon be violence
^^^^^^^^^^ YO NICE GOOD FLOW


i got alot of memories on how u made me cry
but i'ma make 'em old stories...xcept u wanna die
how dare you ask a whole me for a lil respect
when u know i'ld say FUCK U without ant regrets?
expect "the heavens" call....till u pay u fucking debth!
n i wanna give u a taste of my pinky glock
then tell me how it feels to c ur blood pop
cos therre aint NO PEACE till i pull a fucking shot
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ AIGHT DATS GOOD U HAD FLOW (MURDER SCRIPT)


if you looking for a dick to ryde....herre..catch d fucking mic
thought i cant spit tight,but u wish u were my type
i keep flowing as fast like a ride,its iight u take a flight
cos i'ma make u know this aint a dyke & i eat w/e's ripe
for 6 years you werent present in my life
and now u want me to love ya..u know shit aint right
you'ld never reach my height cos u a bitch that cant even bite
if you wanna spet tight,grab a pen and start to write
^^^^^^^^^^^ AIGHT GOOD UR GETTIN PERSONAL (WARNING)

im like a fire and on me u just a cube of ice
i'll grind u into pieces...like tiny grains of rice
cos im black and i can fight,and u wack cos u white...thats right
^^^^^^^^^^^^^ AIGHT NICE CLOSA GOOD PIECE HERE


YO NICE VERSE IT WAS KINDA LIKE AN DISS BUT IT WAS COOL U HAD FLOW AND MULTI'Z

U WERE GETTIN PERSONAL

GOOD PIECE

I GIVE IT AN 7/10

KEEP IT UP

CHECK OUT MY OPEN MIC

~THE PERFECT WORLD~

A yo, man i thought that open mic was on fire u ripped it nice. I liked it cuz it was origional.

MAN ANYBODY GO CHECK OUT MY OPEN MIC, IT'S CALLED "THIS COMES EASY"!

pretty aight though i felt it were kinda simple rhymes here n there...the flow was there throughout the whole piece n u had some slight highlights....keep droppin mc...pz

This shit is wack..

good structure.. alright flow..
wack punchlines..
wack topic.. dont talk about glocks and shit..
thats just annoying.. and wack..

I guess keep workin on it, but u got a long way to go..

You feel how you feel and at times gotta get it out up in your flows. Telling the truth makes a good thread even if you talking about glocks(lol) U do U I'm digging it

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

yea, I wasnt really feeling this piece, I dont know what them first few guys were talkign about, the rhymes were simple, and the flow was off, I can't find anything good to say about this piece, but hey ur a newb, so keep wrking at it and you'll get better

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Originally Posted by Daedal

This shit is wack..

good structure.. alright flow..
wack punchlines..
wack topic.. dont talk about glocks and shit..
thats just annoying.. and wack..

I guess keep workin on it, but u got a long way to go..

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^^errbody got a long way to go...(1)

as for the topic..well,i had hate in my heart and i felt like saying what i thought and felt..nah mean?..so glocks came to my head and i put it down...

anyways thanx for the feedback...


uppin

I thought it was pretty good, better then the average one I see (But then again I don't read that many Open Mic's.. but I will when I start posting mine)

Also, I think you can talk about whatever you want, don't listen to what others say about it

needs work lol seen her before see needs hard work lol it was wakc no ahte but wack

lol exclusive.........iight



uppin