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clarity through my seed
why must i act like a father at the age of eighteen
chances to expirience childish things escaped me
left feelin empty, still not grown but raising a seed
being punished for lack of clarity, witness desparity
look in my eyes to see a life long sacrafice
wasted my youth to raise another right
can't believe what i coulda been
but because one night of passion
i lost my friends and gained responsablity
feelin lousy, lost, and left being lonely
im in need of a true friend to hold me
phony is the lifestyle thats over hyped
it aint right livin life regreting one night
now im stuck as a role model at too early an age
living with decisions i made, in pain,the worst way
too cool for condoms, that is just an oxymoron
like how a one night stand cant be prolonged
my god, please, what did i get myself into
the wrong girl without thinking it through
i guess it's my own fault, maybe i should have listened to my pop
parents can be right, thought not, now i gotta live with what i got
a kid nearing age three constantly looking up to me
it's so hard to control the unforseen but im trying
i acknowledge the mistakes that i have made
using them to teach, patience is the road unpaved
so someday my son will know you can go your own way
this knowledge i will engrave in his brain and he will retain
the fundamental values of the truth
the world revolves around the youth
and it's up to you, what path you choose
lifes not a game, you dont just win or loose
you can either follow or lead
either way do the right thing
and remember life is a journey and not a race
slow down there is no thropey for first place
especally in this case, but im not a disgrace
cuz i have learned from the problems i faced
and now i procliam my son will be much better then me
for he has learned life long lessons from his dad at age 18
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anyone got some feeback for me?
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Well, what to say? Its difficult for feedback to do such a hearfelt and skillful piece justice. Keep up you sound like you are a good father, the world needs more of those as well as good rappers.
peace to you and your family
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are you guys alseep? uppin for honesty. drop solid feedback please. i will return the favor if wanted.
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returning the favour...
I got the point after the first line, that your a father... the theme is dope, real deep shit you've got here. the beginning touched me the most, about how you have to become a role model at such an early age just because of one night.. really makes you think about consequences due to your actions.. one small thing can change some ones life, just like a bullet.. nice piece!
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i liked this shit ..i like it when ppl rap about real shit other than who they killed and how much money they got.. it was deep shit..alot of messages in this writeing hope to read more from you..
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real life situations n struggles always attract readers, especially when they're as well composed as this one...nice piece but i can imagine this being hard to spit to a beat...still I recognize the hard work...keep doin u n good luck....return da favor...pz
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thanks for the feedback guys and the favor has been returned berlin.
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hey djb alot of my homies go through the same shit its tough and my cuz had her son at 15 and he is in the pen now remember to raise that young gun right dont fuck up anyways good shit right there its deep as helll please return the favor for hate this and shit ive seen
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ill game that wasn't really feedback but favor returned anyway. uppin this mother
